scream
There should be no more tomorrow,
When yesterday never did exist.
In the late night when I dream,
Nothing ever seems to change.
The sky explodes and cracks open,
The rain comes pouring down.
This day has finally come to an end,
All my dreams have come and gone.
The rivers in my darkest heart,
The run in blackened streams.
I'm waiting for the sun to rise,
For the light that never came.
NO escape from my constant pain,
No one hears my silent scream.
All of this is just a distant dream,
I pray for the end to sing it's song.
Look down deep, what do you see,
A broken shell on bended knees.
How deep is the river of my fate
In the silence so deep and late.
2007-12-02 08:20:53 · 11 answers · asked by The Dark Prince 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Got a feeling 'the' in the second line below escaped your attention:
The rivers in my darkest heart,
The run in blackened streams.
Otherwise, one more superb effort.
2007-12-03 02:28:08 · answer #1 · answered by ari-pup 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
"The sky explodes and cracks open,
The rain comes pouring down."
This sort of puts a damper on it for me. I don't know, the sky explodes, THEN cracks and opens with rain? Hmmmm...
"The rivers in my darkest heart,
The run in blackened streams.
I'm waiting for the sun to rise,
For the light that never came"
That needs some work
Highlight: "All of this is just a distant dream,
I pray for the end to sing it's song"
2007-12-02 08:29:37 · answer #2 · answered by Chara Pointshot 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Everchanging- Rise Against My Immortal-Evanescence Cancer- My Chemical Romance I Don't Love You-My Chemical Romance Swing Life Away- Rise Against When I Go Down- Relient K
2016-05-27 06:58:28 · answer #3 · answered by ? 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I can relate. I like No escape from my constant pain No one hears my silent scream. Sometimes it's hard to voice what is actually hurting us and we want to be heard, but how? It is a very dark poem, but to me it feels like you are actually reaching out, but then you shut down hope. You say you are waiting for the sun to rise, but then you follow it up with the reality that the light never came. That is so sad, but I love the way you express yourself. Very nice.
2007-12-02 10:52:37 · answer #4 · answered by juniper 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Oh another beautiful poem Dark Prince. It is really sad and made my inner self feel like crying!!! A plus plus plus plus!!!!!
2007-12-02 16:09:37 · answer #5 · answered by Bloom 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow, deep. Hopefully you have a happier side too :-)
2007-12-02 08:30:07 · answer #6 · answered by Corinne L 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
this is great, it has alot of emotion put into it.i felt it when i read it
i love all your other poems too
2007-12-02 08:55:58 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
and again, very good. i like the last couplet - 'river of my fate' is a good one.
2007-12-02 08:30:25 · answer #8 · answered by kleptomanic sheep 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love this poem IT is awesome!
2007-12-02 08:32:32 · answer #9 · answered by Nikki 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow,, thats rly good, its almost definition of my life... bravo!
2007-12-02 13:11:11 · answer #10 · answered by dragonflyy 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋