PLEASE SEE ADDITIONAL DETAILS FOR THE REST OF THE POEM! HERE IS THE FIRST STANZA!
THE SONG OF SEASONS
Fall
Softly, swaying, silent leaves,
Fall gently to the ground.
Swiftly, soaring, in a breeze,
They rest without a sound.
Rainbow trees of orange and red,
Against the bright blue sky.
Piled up in a leaf bed,
Or slowly blowing by.
Children wrapped up in their coats,
Because of the harsh chill.
Wind whistles some music notes,
Fall truly is a thrill!
Winter
Whispers tell a wish or two,
Since Christmas is near by.
Do you want a drum that’s blue,
Or white snow from the sky?
Snow angels and hot cocoa,
Snowman with a carrot nose.
Gingerbread and cookie dough,
A fire to warm your toes.
Ho, ho, ho - that jolly laugh,
That we all know so well.
He gives gifts on our behalf,
Inside his sleigh of bells.
2007-12-02 03:50:58 · 24 answers · asked by Anonymous in Society & Culture ➔ Holidays ➔ Christmas
Summer
Green is the new summer grass,
Beneath the beating sun.
Children know school’s in the past,
And it is time for fun.
Playing jump-rope in the park,
Or swimming at the pool.
Watching movies when it’s dark,
Though summer’s hot, it’s cool!
All we learned will fly away,
Next year we will learn more.
We all want summer to stay,
But school’s the place we soar.
Spring
Flowers blooming all around,
A soft breeze blowing by.
Singing birds, what a sweet sound!
As they soar in the sky.
Baby animals are born,
Little ducks love to play.
Quacking, running, eating corn,
They have fun everyday.
The orchids seem so artful,
Though there’s more rain than fall!
Spring is the most colorful,
Season out of them all!!!
2007-12-02 03:58:42 · update #1
Delightful. Keep up the writing. What a loving gesture. Speaks of your talent, love and self worth. Your parents must be about perfect to have walked by your side, this far....yesterday, today and tomorrow.
2007-12-02 03:57:55 · answer #1 · answered by auntfootsie 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋
I think it a wonderful poem
i made a few changes
but i think it was just as good before.
Softly, swaying, silent leaves,
Falling gently to the ground.
Swiftly, soaring, in a breeze,
To rest without a sound.
Rainbow trees of orange and red,
Against the bright blue sky.
Piled up in a leafy bed,
Or slowly blowing by.
Children wrapped up in coats,
Feeling the harsh chill.
Wind whistling some music notes,
Fall truly is a thrill!
Winter
Winter whispers tell a wish or two,
Since Christmas is near by.
Do you want a drum that’s blue,
Or a snow flake from the sky?
Snow angels and hot cocoa,
Snowmen with a carrots for a nose.
Gingerbread and cookie dough,
A fire to warm your toes.
Ho, ho, ho - that jolly laugh,
That we all know so well.
He gives gifts on our behalf,
Inside his sleigh of bells.
2007-12-02 04:05:01 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
Just so I don't ruin my best answer as it is meant only for those who can comprehend my magic. I did find it off but the word ensnare needed to be there so I figured I will change it because it didn't sound right at the end of the last line. It cannot be changed once you grasp its true direction. You know there are no corrections in poetry if its an expression about you or something else. We will take Shakespeare for an example. #Laughter
2016-05-27 06:03:53 · answer #3 · answered by ? 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nice. Couple of possible changes:
Piled up high in a leaf bed [This might improve the metre]
Wind whistles some enchanting notes [Maybe sounds better]
Transporting gifts on our behalf [Again to improve the metre]
2007-12-02 04:08:51 · answer #4 · answered by John P 4 · 1⤊ 1⤋
I love it; but here are some things i would change:
"piled up in a leaf bed" --> "piled up in a bed of leaves"
(flows easier)
"Because of the harsh chill" --> "To bear the nasty chill"
(i dont like to start a line with 'because')
Other than those two things i really like you're poem, you are very talented!
2007-12-02 03:58:44 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 2⤋
These are beautiful! Excellent work! Have you ever thought of writing one about them and dedicating it to them? As a parent, I would feel so honored!
2007-12-02 04:00:27 · answer #6 · answered by ima-bratt 4 · 1⤊ 1⤋
What is the point of this poem? Does it say anything that has not been said a million times before?
2007-12-02 04:02:54 · answer #7 · answered by the norm 3 · 0⤊ 2⤋
I love it! I write poetry myself as a "hobby" and love to read others' poetry. Im pretty sure ur parents will really like it
x
2007-12-02 03:53:59 · answer #8 · answered by Danielle 2 · 3⤊ 1⤋
Woah those are good
=D I wish I could do poems like you
2007-12-02 03:55:12 · answer #9 · answered by Silly Kid =P 4 · 1⤊ 1⤋
try living in the uk & make poems about weather
2007-12-02 04:48:11 · answer #10 · answered by ireneseanoshea 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋