just keep me,simple
to keep me safe.
do so love
the first breath
winter.
so many changes,
so many seasions.
glad to walk,along this way,
once again.
snow covered footprints..
not one would know
i was here.
do so long this,
first breath of winter,
first breath,of virgin snow,,,
comfort many will never know.
Dorian,
2007-12-01 12:54:29 · 8 answers · asked by dorian 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
It's a beautiful poem portraying solidarity yet vulnerability. It could be put to music by someone that has that talent.
2007-12-01 18:30:30 · answer #1 · answered by U Wish 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nice. I've been reading for while. Saturday nights can be thin. This is very good. I talk a lot about the 'Sawtooth' wave, This has it, irregular line lengths in a rhythmic pattern of their own. I have one that looks like a shark's head. I get more comments on the shape than I do on the text.
2007-12-01 22:09:56 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Feels like a poem. Doesn't have the poetic flow like a song does. The way it's structured seems like you want some words or phrases emphasised more than others.
2007-12-01 21:27:04 · answer #3 · answered by Kim O 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Poem. I can't really see it being a song.
2007-12-01 22:10:36 · answer #4 · answered by Rina 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its definetly poem....as poem is free from time consuming drum beats , bangos etc..its clear and straight
2007-12-01 21:28:29 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's a poem.
2007-12-01 21:10:09 · answer #6 · answered by Chara Pointshot 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it was nice, but i think it should be a poem
2007-12-01 21:05:23 · answer #7 · answered by John Galt 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
songs are poems
its nice
2007-12-01 21:02:15 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋