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Trapping Spree
Escalator ups and downs,
Each platform leads to another,
No sales floor, no exit door,
Just landing after landing after landing,
Elevator door ajar,
Stuck between two floors,
Stairwell locked, barred and blocked
Crimson rope line circles and circles,
Run against cascading steps,
Folding one into the other,
Out at the top, in at the bottom,
Leap entire flights, in flight, alight
Exhausted heap upon the floor,
I cannot climb up or down anymore,
I’ll wither and die, right here in isle five,
Fifth store, fifth floor, fifth door,
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2007-12-01 07:53:43 · 8 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
I did say 'new' which means they've not gotten to know me yet. Wait until the verdict is in.
2007-12-01 08:01:59 · update #1
I read a science fiction story about this once. Going down, down, down...falling from exhaustion, hunger, thirst...no end to the landings, can't go back up...got to give up...
2007-12-01 09:13:40 · answer #1 · answered by Elaine P...is for Poetry 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
I've read this poem before =) and like it very much. But somehow I get the feeling I'm stuck in aisle five, fifth store, fifth floor, fifth door!
2007-12-01 16:06:05 · answer #2 · answered by Marguerite 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
No wasted words in this one! Are you comparing the 'flight' in this one to parachute jumping, or gliding? If you're not, then it would make an interesting internal metaphor of a comparison! Oh yes! I certainly did like this one!
Elysabeth Faslund...Poemhunter.com
2007-12-01 16:37:39 · answer #3 · answered by Elysabeth 7 · 3⤊ 0⤋
So every time you have new contacts, you are going to post the same old stuff???
Shrug.
:)
I've read this already. It's still good though.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=L2d2a4Fsmng
EDIT: Jicky is too stern for me, sweet pepper. I'll stick to Mitsouko.
:)
EDIT2: *sigh* OK, darling, Jicky is me. It's not overinterpretation, it's lack of it, then. I didn't understand anything. Another of your fantasies?
2007-12-01 16:02:58 · answer #4 · answered by Lady Annabella-VInylist 7 · 3⤊ 0⤋
Nice poem and you know I always like your stuff, but I am surprised about something, TD. You said you have friends, .....since when?
2007-12-01 15:58:31 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 4⤊ 0⤋
Yes, another winner. I like your work.
2007-12-01 17:15:15 · answer #6 · answered by Orgazmo 2 · 3⤊ 0⤋
Not Bad Not Bad ...........That damned 5th floor
2007-12-01 17:02:28 · answer #7 · answered by Andrew M 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
exellent poem
2007-12-01 16:01:42 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 3⤊ 0⤋