please revise this short pagaph and add some new phrases?

Question

According to Act, we receive power to preach the gospel when the Holy Spirit is with us. We should teach them about Jesus’ love. We should help others by the name of God. We should not force non-Christians to believe in Christ because it is rude. We should help physically and mentally challenged people by giving them love and hands. We should encourage the weak and the poor that they will not suffer from thirst and hunger in heaven. We should be the leader of this world to preach the gospel. Then as we are happy, God in heaven will be even more proud of us and grant us the treasures. Even if we face the death, we shall not be afraid because God will be with us wherever we go. Preaching the words of God is significant because Jesus states the final sentence “you will be my witnesses.”

thank you for revising

Answer 1

I've made a few revisons, with alternative suggestions in brackets. It would help, however, to know for whom or what you're writing this paragraph. To me, it sounds like an answer to an essay question (on a take-home test, I hope!).

According to Acts, we receive power to preach the Gospel when the Holy Spirit is with us. We should use that power to teach people [or others] about Jesus’ love. We should help others by [Do you really mean "by," or would "in" be better?] the name of God. We should not harrass [or badger] non-Christians to believe in Christ, because forcing one's beliefs on others is rude. We should help physically and mentally challenged people by giving them love and hands. We should encourage the weak and the poor so that they will not suffer from thirst and hunger in heaven. We should be the leaders of this world to preach the gospel. Then as we are happy, God in heaven will be even more proud of us and grant us the [Do you ned this word?] treasures. Even if we face death, we shall not be afraid, because God will be with us wherever we go. Preaching the words of God is important, because Jesus states the final sentence “you will be my witnesses.”

For a single paragraph, what you've written is enough, but it would help to make the transitons between sentences smoother--that is, show more clearly the relation between one sentence and the next. It would also improve the paragraph to put the sentence beginning with "We should not" third, turn it into a subordinate clause beginning with "although," and add an independent clause about what we should do instead, which seems to be show our faith by our actions and examples. That way you'll lead right into the sentences about helping others. Finally, how about revising the last sentence and moving it to the very beginning? Say something like this: By preaching the words of God, we are fulfilling Jesus' final instructions, “You will be my witnesses.”

Answer 2

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