The beautiful, perfect, deep rich red,
A wonderful shroud over a humble head.
Like a ruby in the July sun it shines,
Edges sparkling with golden lines.
The velvety softness of the shroud,
So humble, yet oh-so-proud.
A rough thorny body that easily harms,
Yet so quickly and magically charms.
The purfumy scent as I slowly breathe in,
Smelling so sweet it should be a sin.
I don't want to leave the blissful place,
The scent surrounds me so I'm completely encased.
The musical words of love that he speaks to me.
Is he talking about us? Is he talking about we?
Is he making a promise of happily-ever-after,
Or just giving me a fun moment, filled with laughter?
2007-12-01 03:06:47 · 8 answers · asked by PinkElmo 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Does a rose mean love, or security?
Or is just material, disguised in purity?
Is this a gift, a mere possession?
Have I fallen into a deep obsession?
But all questions are swept from my mind,
As he gives a kiss, so soft and kind.
And when we break free and he leaves with a bow,
I realize the answers don't matter-just live in the now.
2007-12-01 03:06:57 · update #1
If you don't like it, please say so (but don't just say that to be mean or anything, you have to ACTUALLY not like it!) Do you like or not, and why?
2007-12-01 03:07:51 · update #2
also, still needs a title
2007-12-01 03:08:05 · update #3
I really like the way you question romantic gestures, because not everybody conforms to social or cultural stereotypes. The rose is a perfect example to have chosen for this theme, because, flowers have a tendancy to wither and die, so I can never view something of such nature to be a symbol of immortal love. You have also played onto the idea that everybody wants to be made to feel special in some way, and willingly accept such a gift purely because it can only be given to a person once. Normally I prefer my art forms deal with much darkr themes but this, but the way you wrote this, it reallly appeals to me. Look forward to reading mor of your work, keep it up!
2007-12-01 04:17:59 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is a lovely Poem and I chiefly just like the final stanza. It makes me feel of affection that's unreachable on account that of distance via any factor however the middle and soul. Theme tune to the Titanic turns out to play within the again flooring as i learn this poem.
2016-09-05 17:37:27 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
OMG! That was so good. I don't think i've ever read a poem like that before that really touched my heart. You're gonna go far in life if you keep written poems.
Beverly Hill
2007-12-01 03:19:03 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow... i wish i could write that good. pleae write more. its perfect but really think on the name and give it meaning. i love it honestly. its great. dont listen to negativity this is super!
2007-12-01 03:16:26 · answer #4 · answered by AbbiLovesNick&BlooregardQ.Kazoo 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
hey,
its pretty good.
But it needs that spark, that blows you away, and leaves you speechless, right after your done reading it.
2007-12-01 03:19:51 · answer #5 · answered by Smacker =) 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i really love it but something about it needs improvement...but the first paragraph is great
2007-12-01 03:13:45 · answer #6 · answered by ~*Jenny*~ 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I REALLY LIKE IT. its nice that should be published some where
2007-12-01 03:10:57 · answer #7 · answered by Stephanie P 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
needs improvement
2007-12-01 03:10:17 · answer #8 · answered by Rana 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋