What do you think of this poem?

Question

One who hurts children will never win,
God will avenge such an awful sin,
And set an example for all men,
To prevent this outrage from happening again.
What will these sinners say
On judgement day,
When they're at the gates
Where god patiently waits
And asked why they did what god hates.
They will pay, God won't delay
For the grave mistake they made
By having their way,
With defenseless creatures,
Who are taught to trust their teachers,
Whose natural dependence is betrayed,
And for one who hurts a child
The consequences won't be mild,
God will always avenge the pain of an innocent child.

Answer 1

Um, well, I suppose it would fly in Sunday school. People might wonder, though, why your god didn't protect the innocent children and prevent them from being harmed in the first place. What kind of god knows about such a horrible crime before it happens, but does nothing to prevent it? How would this god judge a human who also knew in advance that this crime would occur, but did nothing to stop it?

Answer 2

You subject makes sure it will be a poem for certain evokes an emotion response. As for structure, rythym rhyme etc you could take some time to polish it. Choose slightly different words with even greater impact and to make it flow better. Read it out loud to see how it flows. Once you are happy with it you can submit it to whomever.

Answer 3

An interesting poem. It told that human is full of sins. we always do something although we know that it is wrong. Be thankful of what we have and what we are now especially your parents and teacher. don't hurt people for you own parioryty. And if you believe on he then he will always be with you.

Answer 4

Very thought provoking subject matter. Very eloquently put. I'd like to see those bastards get what they deserve too. As far as poetic creativity and skill goes, it's not bad at all.

Answer 5

well i don't think god will do anything of that sort for i don't believe in god