*****
Steve
Nonsensical inkblot dribbler,
Babbling crayon scribbler,
You don’t care about art, do you?
Oh fountain of horrible Haiku.
Worrisome wobbling meddler,
Cornball muffin fluff peddler,
Simpleton rhyming, Keystone Kop timing,
Butt jokes, eye pokes, then miming.
When will you ever get serious?
These puns, they make me delirious,
I want to hear more about politics,
Not your friends and their hockey sticks!
Our most highly respected scholar,
He’s downstairs in cards for a dollar,
His pen, a burden unbearable,
Mediocrity, oh so terrible.
*****
2007-12-01 02:07:09 · 7 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Steve made fun of me the other day. He said I only ask one question, "Do you like my poem?"
So, I had to think of a new question...hehehe
2007-12-01 02:24:21 · update #1
I didn't make fun of you the other day, so I don't know if this is for me or not. I never made fun of u though, so if it is sorry for the misunderstanding. If it's not for me...sorry too.
2007-12-01 07:18:52 · answer #1 · answered by The Dark Prince 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hahahahaha What a way you have with words and poetry, TD. Now if we could only take that raw talent and transform it into something like predicting the stock market, we could clean up and make Bill Gates move down a notch.
2007-12-01 11:42:03 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
This is called a 'hit poem'. But, it goes beyond a tiff...this is really GOOD, and can stand by itself as a true poem.
The end rhymes are not 'forced', the internal rhymes do it further justice, and you have some GREAT images here! Very original, creative, and fresh...THAT is great to read!
Whatever tiff you have going on, it has been the incentive for this really good work! Bravo!
Elysabeth Faslund...Poemhunter.com
2007-12-01 10:41:11 · answer #3 · answered by Elysabeth 7 · 3⤊ 1⤋
not bad i guess compared to most people that write poetry these days. youve got a very doggerel sounding rhymescheme and no meter or use of imagery or hidden meanings beneath the surface, in fact, its very "what you see is what you get" for lack of a better phrase, but its very light, almost comical at the same time, but for the love of God, please take out those "OH," and "OH SO's" and throw them in the trash, they really dont mesh well with the nature, or style of this poem
2007-12-01 10:40:16 · answer #4 · answered by Chad M 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very funny!
2007-12-01 12:45:32 · answer #5 · answered by Lady Annabella-VInylist 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not bad at all.
That 'Steve' sounds like someone I know.
2007-12-01 10:18:20 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 5⤊ 0⤋
you posted this the other day...but you've given it a name now. what did this 'steve' do to deserve this then?
2007-12-01 10:16:53 · answer #7 · answered by kleptomanic sheep 5 · 4⤊ 0⤋