Traversing crystalized frost beneath his feet
Attentive wanderer, sure-footed, incomplete
The Mother yielding, displaying her willing zest
Each step closer to gifts of the vision quest
The soaring eagle confirms acknowledgement
Tipping its feathered wing, winking contentment
Observing through keen eyes, gaining inner strength
Lineage promise kept adding spiritual breadth
Journey accomplished to much satisfaction
Walking proudly forward without distraction
A boy, adolescent, departing from youth
The wanderer forever honored by truth
2007-11-30 08:35:06 · 10 answers · asked by Marguerite 7 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Great!
This is a very good poem. I love the message of the poem. Indeed you have a great talent. You could be a good philosopher banking on your thoughts and wisdom. Congratulations for a job well done.
God Bless!
Have a great day.
2007-11-30 11:40:41 · answer #1 · answered by Third P 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Why did I think of the mummy of the 'Ice Man' when I read this? The terrain is right, but the 'Ice Man' wasn't a youth.
I understand this poem very well, but does it not work equally well in being a poem of humankind's evolution, and not just a 'vision quest'? Mankind's journey upwards, as the youth journeys upwards on his vision quest...proving to be a man.
When a poem has several meanings which could be valid(each one), then truly, it is a remarkable poem! Bravo!
Elysabeth Faslund...Poemhunter.com
2007-11-30 09:00:18 · answer #2 · answered by Elysabeth 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very proud of your son. I like it and I knew it was about a child when read the fourth line. Very good.
2007-11-30 09:05:37 · answer #3 · answered by Coop 366 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really like your poems... They have such fluidity and always make me feel like I am there. Sort of like a "Pans Labyrinth" type feel to it. Good Job...
2007-12-01 11:12:19 · answer #4 · answered by *Veronica* 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not bad at all. Shows promise.
2007-11-30 08:40:56 · answer #5 · answered by Sahmyel 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love how it flow es. do you have a poetic soul or is the world round?
2007-11-30 08:38:57 · answer #6 · answered by Rouxe *(Rue)* 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow i always love to read your poems as they are always so descriptive and have beautiful meanings .. Your really quite good.good. ,
2007-11-30 20:23:44 · answer #7 · answered by Cami lives 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
You always use meter and rhyme very well in your poetry--very pleasing cadence.
2007-11-30 09:14:36 · answer #8 · answered by Todd 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Love it!
2007-12-02 17:49:47 · answer #9 · answered by poe 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
this is a good one, keep up the good work!!
2007-11-30 08:52:49 · answer #10 · answered by VERNA S 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋