Thoughts Please
COLD BY CHOICE
I remember
there were no inhibitions
everything
was done by my volition.
Time goes by
innocence is lost beneath the wave
of our youth,
falling into memory, a grave.
Please don't tell,
I've forgotten what it's like to cry.
Being numb
is the way I keep myself alive.
I'm alone,
I'm an actress and my stage is dark.
Save me
from reflection of the mirror stark.
I know
that you think I'm hiding from what's real.
I don't care,
because it hurts me too damn much to feel.
It's my fault,
I am only by myself betrayed.
That's all right,
my debt to myself is wholly paid.
2007-11-30 06:02:47 · 15 answers · asked by Evadne Soleil 6 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
sounds like a song by sarah mclachlan about winter...
2007-11-30 06:10:16 · answer #1 · answered by Libby 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
you poem is good keep writing
Like a mask I wear the smile
My innocence was long since stolen
By the long cold endless dark
My soul watches the void of eternity
Each life passes into the next
Memories seep beyond death
Teaching newborns to know the dark
No tears be shed, fear not the dark
The boogiemen warned stay clear
I come, rage burns, darkness flees
We stand on the edge of shadow
No harm be done by our hand
But slay the world to defend one child
No greater quest, protect the child
Or to know one second of true love.
2007-11-30 06:27:36 · answer #2 · answered by steven m 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Tell me I'm frozen
but know it not to be true
Your the true numb one
And still i freeze for you
Blistering and bleeding
I wait for your embrace
But i sit warm by the fire
Of the veil that hides my face
Tada! and by the way, i think you r the greatest poet who ever lived... in the area LOL.
2007-11-30 07:52:14 · answer #3 · answered by Rouxe *(Rue)* 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I, too, may feel a bit of frost
But, true feeling I have not lost.
The things endured are truly hard,
Which turns me into this rough bard.
But, I know surely, this I will get through.
This I hope... for me and you!
2007-11-30 06:08:58 · answer #4 · answered by tool84u_2000 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your feelings are well expressed. Keep writing. It will help to "unravel" the problem and can bring about more personal discoveries and solutions for you.
2007-11-30 06:07:42 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sound like lyrics to quite a deep song.
Know any good music writers??
2007-11-30 06:06:10 · answer #6 · answered by Miln3shine 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's really wonderful, and you are a great observer of human inner self.
2007-11-30 06:59:40 · answer #7 · answered by Analyst 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Love this one....BUT it's too short!! Go deeper. You're very good!
issues;
Numb how exactly?
"....in the mirror stark" get rid of "stark"
2007-11-30 06:57:06 · answer #8 · answered by radman2035 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's pretty gosh darn cold in my office so yah i'm frozen. LOL wearing my winter coat and scarf and still cold!
2007-11-30 06:23:00 · answer #9 · answered by Hey U, Yeah U..Get over here 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I like it
2007-11-30 06:05:32 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋