Do you or does someone you know suffer from that horrible sleeping disorder called, snoring? Do they constantly deny that they do not snore? Is it preventing others from getting a good night’s sleep? Does it drive you so crazy to the point where you find yourself sleeping on the coach just to prevent it? If so, you are not the only person who is going crazy trying to get some sleep, but I think I may have the solution to help reduce your problem. It has also been proven to cause psychological and social problems. I’m sure you did not think snoring caused so many issues, did you?
What is snoring? Dictionary.com describes snoring as, “to breathe during sleep with hoarse or harsh sounds caused by the vibrating of the soft palate.” Another definition is, “to pass (time) in snoring or sleeping (usually followed by away or out), for example to snore the day away”. GB states snoring is known to cause side effects such as, “irritability, lack of focus, decreases libido and daytime sleepines
2007-11-28 13:11:46 · 8 answers · asked by Milla 3 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
Do you or does someone you know suffer from that horrible sleep disorder known as snoring? Do they constantly deny that they snore? Is their snoring preventing others from getting a good night's sleep? Does it drive you crazy to the point where you find yourself sleeping on the couch just to avoid it? If so, you are not the only person who is going crazy trying to get some sleep. Aside from these things, snoring has some serious health effects. Snoring has been proven to cause psychological and social problems.
What is snoring? Dictionary.com describes snoring as, “to breathe during sleep with hoarse or harsh sounds caused by the vibrating of the soft palate.” GB {{Who is GB}} states snoring is known to cause side effects such as, “irritability, lack of focus, a decrease in libido and daytime sleepiness.
2007-11-28 13:18:45 · answer #1 · answered by Kaye Apollo 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Good topic, but what type of essay is this?
Needs a lot of work!!!!!!!!
Mistakes/Suggestions:
1) "Do they constantly deny that they do not snore?"
Are they admitting that they do snore? Double Negative
2) "Coach"
Spelling : Couch
3) Overall Flow
Too many questions, not in right order. Intro should be 5 sentences. a) intro b,c,d) proofs e) thesis. Why is it informal?
4) Dictionary.com?
What the heck??!!!!! in an essay? NO
Honest truth: What grade are you in?
If in grade 9 or above it is not good.
Essay structure: min 5 sentences each
Paragraph 1: 5 sentences, intro, 3 proofs, and thesis
Paragraph 2: 5 sntcs discuss 1st proof
Paragraph 3: 5 sntcs discuss 2nd proof
Paragraph 4: 5 sntcs discuss 3rd proof
Paragraph 5: 5 sntcs restate, ideas, thesis in a different way...
TIPS::::: spell check, don't use I, We etc.
2007-11-28 13:22:20 · answer #2 · answered by ♥※?Paranoia?Nah...※♥ 4 · 1⤊ 1⤋
They need quite a bit of work. I'll give you some pointers here to start off, but if you'd like more help, you can e-mail me and I'd be glad to help. I've included some changes and some notes so you know what is wrong or redundant, and for what reasons.
Do you or anyone you know suffer from that horrible sleeping disorder called [no comma] snoring? Do they [or you?] constantly deny that they do not snore? [this question is a double negative]
Does their snoring impact the sleep of others? Does it drive you so crazy to the point where you find yourself sleeping on the coach just to prevent it? [Too many qualifying questions]
If so, you are not the only person who is going crazy [to say "going crazy" is redundant, as you've already asked so many qualifying questions, you're pretty much kicking a dead horse at this point] trying to get some sleep, but I think I may have the solution to help reduce your problem.
Like I said, I think there is a lot of work that needs to be done. Please e-mail me if you'd like more help. It would just take a lot of feedback to put it all here. Click my profile and you can e-mail me through there.
2007-11-28 13:21:09 · answer #3 · answered by Mickey Mouse Spears 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I didn't even manage to get past the question. The question should be "how do these two paragraphs sound" and NOT "...does this..."
2007-11-28 13:16:48 · answer #4 · answered by jdnmsedsacrasac1 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Its boring. Has too many questions. Looks like you just wrote whatever you read from some book or copied and pasted it.
2007-11-28 13:15:05 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
"...but I think I may have the solution to help reduce your problem. IT has also been proven to cause psychological and social problems."
I would change the word "it" to "snoring" so the meaning is clear.
2007-11-28 13:15:17 · answer #6 · answered by llllarry1 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
It stinks!
2007-11-28 13:14:08 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
get to the point. what is your solution?
2007-11-28 13:15:11 · answer #8 · answered by twister 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋