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Question

Beside what CNN was showing, online blog website was full of angrily comments against the Nick News with Linda Ellerbee “Rebels with a Cause” episode. Nevertheless, the second and last segments of episode were the most contentious segments that people will for irritated and crazy. Most of the people were angry on the boy of the second segments who was calling for the impeachment of the President. In addition, the fourth segment, the teenage girl blames America for what is happening in Iraq. The girl placed some images and videos that look she got them from Al-Jazeera network in her segments. In an online article, John Stephenson reported that one of the members of the Army Wife Toddler Mom website stated “This Nickelodeon “news program” is not a news program. It is a leftist primer on how to be a “left-wing radical rebel.” I strongly disagree with this statement; the Nick News with Linda Ellerbee had been more informative than the local news and even CNN. Children today are smart enough to form their own opinions on the issues they face. The member of the Army Wife Toddler Mom website posted that the address and contract information of Nickelodeon and asking the bloggers to call or write a letter to Nickelodeon people to fire Linda Ellerbee for brainwashing our children.

Answer 1

you got over running sentences , missing periods and try a different subject

Answer 2

Revised:

Beside what CNN was showing, online blog website was full of angry comments against the Nick News with Linda Ellerbee “Rebels with a Cause” episode. Nevertheless, the second and last segments of the episode were the most contentious segments that made people irritated and crazy. Most of the people were angry at the boy of the second segments who was calling for the impeachment of the President. In addition, the fourth segment, the teenage girl blames America for what is happening in Iraq. The girl placed some images and videos that look she got them from Al-Jazeera network in her segments. In an online article, John Stephenson reported that one of the members of the Army Wife Toddler Mom website stated “This Nickelodeon “news program” is not a news program. It is a leftist primer on how to be a “left-wing radical rebel.” I strongly disagree with this statement; the Nick News with Linda Ellerbee show had been more informative than the local news and even CNN. Children today are smart enough to form their own opinions on the issues they face. The member of the 'Army Wife Toddler Mom' website posted the address and contract information of Nickelodeon and asked the bloggers to call or write a letter to Nickelodeon people to fire Linda Ellerbee for brainwashing our children.

Answer 3

Lotta errors here, but let's see what we can do. Comments about content are [placed in brackets like this].

Besides what the news agency CNN was showing, the online blog website was full of angry comments against the Nick News with Linda Ellerbee's “Rebels with a Cause” episode. Nevertheless, the second and last segments of episode were the most contentious segments that people [this makes no sense-->} will for irritated and crazy[<--this makes no sense]

Most of the posts displayed anger directed toward the boy in the second segment who was calling for the impeachment of the President. Anger was also directed toward the teenage girl in the the fourth segment who blames America for what is happening in Iraq. The girl displayed some images and videos which look she like got them from Al-Jazeera network [judgement call in this paragraph is out of place] in her segments. [Nothing more said on the posts, makes this seem odd.]

In an online article [ need to state where the article was found], John Stephenson [who is this guy?] reported that one of the members of the Army Wife Toddler Mom website stated “This Nickelodeon 'news program' is not a news program. It is a leftist primer on how to be a “left-wing radical rebel.” [Suddenly changing tense from third person to first. Might want to change the tense of the first paragraphs to match.]
I strongly disagree with this statement; the Nick News with Linda Ellerbee had been more informative than the local news and even CNN. [No proof of previous statement?]

Children today are smart enough to form their own opinions on the issues they face. [Again, no proof of this statement. Seems to say that 5 yr olds have ability to make opinions. May want to clarify what ages of children you refer to.] The member of the Army Wife Toddler Mom website posted the address and contract information of Nickelodeon and asking the bloggers to call or write a letter to Nickelodeon people to fire Linda Ellerbee for brainwashing our children. [So? How does this pertain to the rest of your essay?]

All in all a disjointed essay which does little to dispel or explain any stance on teh subject of Ellerbee's program. Take more time to get your research and change the information in your paragraphs.

Answer 4

hmmm...seems like English is your second language because words are used incorrectly and sometimes not used correctly as single or plural, and as an adverb when it should be a noun. I don't know that a report should begin with the word "besides".

If the above is merely a letter of complaint then just send it. They will understand the errors. If it is for publishing then I suggest you find some English friend to review it for you offline as there may be more than one editing.

king (a responder) uses plural when it should be singular, and marvinat (a responder) uses your word "angrily" which is still wrong....gee, get yourself a good English teacher to help you re-do your report.