this is how it should be
this is the life i deserve
this is my curse
this is my fate
all these i must endure
for i have sinned
i have offended
i have defiled thee
i must pay dearly
redeem thy soul
with tears and blood
until my heart stops...
to my very last breath..
there will only be...
sorrow and pain
peace unfounded
all my fears
shall find me unguarded
til the moment of my own death.
Dear God i seek thee
FORGIVE ME!
2007-11-27 16:30:33 · 19 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
@Ahmed
gawd...you brought tears in my eyes. (--\\
2007-11-27 17:11:06 · update #1
ששששאאאא Curse In Mine Own Hands ששששאאאא
For, You Yourself Whispered In This Poem, That -- THIS IS HOW IT SHOULD BE, THIS IS THE LIFE I DESERVE, THIS IS MY CURSE, THIS IS MY FATE, ALL THESE I MUST ENDURE ... Why? You Go On To Say, FOR I HAVE SINNED, I HAVE OFFENDED, I HAVE DEFILED THEE... So, What Now? You Go On To Say, I MUST PAY DEARLY, REDEEM THY SOUL, WITH TEARS AND BLOOD, UNTIL MY HEART STOPS... TO MY VERY LAST BREATH.. So, What Comes Of All These Statements? You Emphasize And Declare, THERE WILL ONLY BE... SORROW AND PAIN, PEACE UNCONFOUNDED, ALL MY FEARS, SHALL FIND ME UNGUARDED, TIL THE MOMENT OF MY OWN DEATH, DEAR GOD i SEEK THEE, FORGIVE ME!
As I Wrote Your Poem It Made More Sense To Me. From Reading Lots Of Your Poetry, If It's Legitimately Yours, I Have Gained Awareness, How Your Mind And Spirit Thrive, Together.
Your Poem Made Me Feel, Like You Doubt Yourself, Alot. Like Things, Not In Your Control, Revolved, And That Has You Questioning Everything. Listen, Our Fate Is Never Sealed, Remember That! We Can Stop, Whatever Wrong We Are Doing, And Our Heart And Last Breath Might Be Extended... God Has Good Things Planned For Us If We Serve Him, Remember That! Sometimes, Adolescense Makes Us Feel As Such, Because We Are Dependent On Others... Give It A Few Years, Get A Job Or Go To College, And Then Focus On The Greater 'Whys" Of Life. Pray To God!!! Ask Him, Talk To Him Like You Would A Friend, But Someone Who You Can Trust, Read The Bible, Read The Book Of PSALMS .. There Is Alot Of Good Poetry In There...
Good Poem, Nonetheless!
2007-11-28 08:32:38 · answer #1 · answered by ? 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
A Prayer for Repentance
2007-11-27 21:38:05 · answer #2 · answered by Elaine P...is for Poetry 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
. . . . yet another remarkable esoteric gem!
Surely, you've got this rare talent of expressing, quite effortlessly, profound existential issues in confounding simple style. Indeed, "this is how it should be," but unfortunately, not many of us are so equally gifted! Reminds one of Pablo Neruda and Jorge Luis Borges poems!
Call it "A passionate confession"
good luck
2007-11-27 23:23:41 · answer #3 · answered by ari-pup 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
The Beggar
2007-11-27 16:37:02 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Redemption
Seeking God
Many of the lines of your poem would work:
Tears and blood
Sorrow and pain etc.
Not an awful poem at all......just a waterfall of emotion and thoughts. And that's okay. I like it.
2007-11-27 17:14:14 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
My Repentant Soul
2007-11-27 16:58:30 · answer #6 · answered by boyplakwatsa.com 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
The Quest
2007-11-27 16:44:50 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Last Resort
2007-11-28 06:19:20 · answer #8 · answered by Shakespear 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Real Repentance.
2007-11-27 18:03:09 · answer #9 · answered by Poch_P 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think that it would be interesting to have the last line of your poem as the title...
Forgive Me
2007-11-27 16:43:40 · answer #10 · answered by dancelikewhaaaat 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋