It's over
It's over and i have nothing more to say
I've let go of what has been done...
everything we despised has gone away
we were more of God's disaster
Seasons will pass and i shall no longer
imagine your face nor remember
how i fought for the love i could have sworn
was heaven's last reward..i falter...
the last thing we could ever be..is together.
2007-11-27 16:11:25 · 12 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Lolz @ Noh! "Wow"?! hahaha...=P
2007-11-28 10:55:49 · update #1
I really like the mood of acceptance here. You realize that something you thought was eternal was really ephemeral and you're accepting that and moving on. The poem doesn't need to demonstrate ascension yet; this is a first step in the ascending journey to happiness. If you wrote a series, the next poem would show a perception that happiness is out there, although hidden, and you're striving to find it.
2007-11-27 21:35:26 · answer #1 · answered by Elaine P...is for Poetry 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Beats mine.
Yellow the bracken
Golden the sheaves
Rosie the apples
Crimson the leaves
Mist on the hill side
Clouds Grey and white
Autumn good morning
Summer good night.......
2007-11-28 09:34:14 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
it's a double meaning..... what was taken from you was your innocence; god's disaster is the fact we all have to grow up and deal grown up crap. the face is that of childhood, and heaven's last reward is death. but we have to grow up. we have to accept the fact we will all die. but before we do, we affect the lives of all those around us, and as we affect those lives, we are offered a choice: immortality, or nothing. good poem.
2007-11-28 06:08:26 · answer #3 · answered by coltfan70 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Not bad. Im guessing its going to an X where things went sick and wrong and this is your way of beginning the healing process?
2007-11-28 00:21:27 · answer #4 · answered by Abolir Las Farc 6 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Simple words
expressing a strong resolution.
why is God supposed to be
worried about it.
2007-11-28 07:38:19 · answer #5 · answered by oldbob 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
No.Not if it is only halfway completed.You need an ascension in theme to offset the morose tenor thus far written.
2007-11-28 00:47:30 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
I liked it you got right to the point 'of it no sugar coating at all., .
2007-11-28 02:28:58 · answer #7 · answered by Cami lives 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
wow .i really like it . sound;s to me you gave up on a relationship .
2007-11-28 07:55:07 · answer #8 · answered by Snuggles 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's not half as bad as you already think it is.
2007-11-28 14:24:47 · answer #9 · answered by Shakespear 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
its really good ...you got potential...it iis alot less disturbing than your other poems ..but even they were good...
2007-11-28 00:26:23 · answer #10 · answered by UniformChaos 3 · 1⤊ 1⤋