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Water
Falling down around the edges
Pooled droplet domes
A crease in the sand
Trickling, flowing
Directionless meandering
Joins the enjoined, tributary
To stream, and river’s torrent
Engulfed, saline fusion
Sea to Ocean current
Challenger Deep
Evaporation
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2007-11-27 07:35:42 · 7 answers · asked by TD Euwaite? 6 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Spitfire! That is precious!
2007-11-27 09:24:00 · update #1
I like your "Loop a loop" better... =)
(i'm most proud of my "You & Me" poem anyways)
2007-11-27 09:05:39 · answer #1 · answered by Dark Dickinsonian 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋
beautiful and descriptive. You've done a great job of creatively capturing the characteristics of water. As for my poems, I do actually have a poem I am proud of and unfortunately it is too long to post in answers. Also, my poems don't even compare to yours, but if you are interested here is my favorite poem. Some people find it quite funny It's on my 360 page and it was inspired by my son who was 4 at the time. It's called Boogie (just scroll down a bit).
http://blog.360.yahoo.com/blog-XcthPpsid6eo0nfHzkRc53rwGduTpzJIF8fS2LI-?cq=1&l=6&u=7&mx=7&lmt=5
Awww, shucks
2007-11-27 16:52:35 · answer #2 · answered by Sptfyr 7 · 3⤊ 0⤋
THE ANCIENT PLAINTIVE SONG
The wind blows over the fields now
As it did so long ago
And through the grass on the silent mounds
Its notes begin to blow
A plaintive tune
To which we bow
As we stand on these grounds
And think not yet of what we sow
Beneath the meadow's brow.
We've planted many fields.
And still the wind blows on.
Knowing what we know not,
Receiving what we've sown.
We stand and fall, but think not,
As wind blows on and on.
Blow to a flame our embers,
Warmth that now rests in earth,
Sinews rejoin to members,
Give to the fallen birth,
Those of the wars long past
The silent rebound at the trumpet,
Graves break with life at last.
[Spitfire: I loved it!!! You've got some cuties, They're keepers.]
2007-11-27 15:52:40 · answer #3 · answered by Fr. Al 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
This, is a very vivid and beautiful poem. It's well written, and the imagery is just exceptional in this piece. Plus, I loved that this poem( at least in my interpretation) expresses a person who finds their path in life.
And my favorite poem, " I prefer Life Unclothed" is a poem I wrote a couple months ago. Now, based on the title, it's not what you think- it expresses that I want to see life with all of its flaws, so I don't remain in ignorance about life.
2007-11-27 21:41:05 · answer #4 · answered by Taja B 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes I liked that one to.
The endless cycle,
Till the sun goes out.
Put the mind in perspective to relate to time.
Erosion,
Corrosion,
Sedimentation,
Consolidation.
Deformation.
2007-11-27 17:12:26 · answer #5 · answered by TWOBOB 4 · 3⤊ 0⤋
i can almost touch the water.... =]
i'm most proud of my poem entitled Unhope - it should be on the resolved Qs soemthwere if ur that desperate to read it. which i doubt. =]
2007-11-27 15:49:10 · answer #6 · answered by kleptomanic sheep 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Breathless once again sweetie! One day I'll have to share some of my works with you!
2007-11-27 15:41:21 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋