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Time
Upon my watch, three hands tell me the time,
The mirror shows a different degree,
Forgotten thoughts with words that do not rhyme,
Meander down the road to lunacy.
Shine your shoes up!
Put on your tie!
Let’s go outside…
And find a place to fly!
Come and gone for me to see, believed,
The ocean tides, rivers wide, crimson sky,
How will I know when God has called to me?
Upon my watch, three hands tell me the time.
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2007-11-27 07:27:56 · 5 answers · asked by TD Euwaite? 6 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Marg...I stretch the rukes and the iambs as far as they go...I can speak in penta...with some artistry...
2007-11-27 07:59:28 · update #1
Yes...Destinations was another Dorsimbra
2007-11-27 08:00:35 · update #2
New one on me!
Dorsimbra?
My spell check.
My dictionary.
My Thesaurus.
Don't have it.
The Y/A spell check flags it as a misspelling.
Clue me in buddy.
2007-11-27 08:55:40 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 3⤊ 0⤋
Your artistry outdoes me, even when you stretch a bit in places. Keep it up and keep posting. How about some new challenges? a couple of us haven't tried Dorsimbras yet.
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2007-11-27 23:27:28 · answer #2 · answered by Fr. Al 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes, I like it. And you've inspired me. I shall attempt my first Dorsimbra. But, I am getting confused with the syllable count. I will have to study it further. Or am I getting hung up on the wrong emphasis?
2007-11-27 15:55:46 · answer #3 · answered by Marguerite 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
I like it very much. The flow of the poem with it's long stanza, quick stanza, and the long again creates a very interesting and rhythm. I especially like the way it ends as it begins. It gives the poem a definite sense of closure. The poem itself very good too. Is this the same form as Destinations?
2007-11-27 15:51:22 · answer #4 · answered by Sptfyr 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
huwaw. i LOVE it.
2007-11-27 15:36:17 · answer #5 · answered by piglet :) 2 · 2⤊ 0⤋