a day in the life...
Frozen limbs today
Shaking from winter's shock blast
Stay inside all day
The feel of your thigh
Taught and soft at the same time
Sexy and a dream
Lost again with you
Two hearts beating with desire
Your eyes, no escape
Take me down with you
Nestled between your legs now
I feel your hot fire
Why does love vanish
How can it just disappear
It's time is over
The earth does feel pain
At times she cries for days
With anger comes fire
2007-11-26 04:03:03 · 9 answers · asked by The Dark Prince 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
I realize that Haiku is traditionally 5-7-5. Each stanza of this is a single haiku, but the 6 together form one poem. i am just trying something new. I don't know if it has been done before or if there is a name for it, but i am just experimenting.
2007-11-26 04:27:17 · update #1
Call it a haikoem. =)
Spring always arrives
promising you birth and joy.
Pansies laugh and smile.
2007-11-26 19:51:24 · answer #1 · answered by Marguerite 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Wonderful hybrid haiku, I can feel the love expressed in each line...
2007-11-26 14:43:01 · answer #2 · answered by Analyst 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it but not as much as the dark poetry. Good job on the poem! You used some alliteration too.
2007-11-26 23:36:42 · answer #3 · answered by Bloom 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
fantastic poem with a great story line .i love the way you intertwined the stanza's with all the sensual story line..great job Peachie 1
2007-11-26 14:28:57 · answer #4 · answered by Cami lives 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow. LOVE the new poetry form. It's great!!
I think the last one was the best though.
But all of it together was awesome.
2007-11-26 15:56:36 · answer #5 · answered by Silent Anger 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
too many errors. Haiku should be one stanza, not several. But hey, it's a nice try.
2007-11-26 12:10:43 · answer #6 · answered by Marvinator 7 · 0⤊ 2⤋
its good wether it follows suit or not.
2007-11-26 20:11:52 · answer #7 · answered by dragonflyy 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
omg freakin awesome!!!keep em comin!!!!!
2007-11-26 12:11:25 · answer #8 · answered by mariah 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it is lovely
2007-11-26 13:43:22 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋