Many things run in my family; a fiery passion, an obvious sense of humor, an outgoing energy, and twins. It seems that every trait in the family gene pool skipped over me….except twinship.
I always thought about what I’d do to be like my family, when I was too little to realize that next to nothing could be done about it. And every single time I pondered it I cam to the same conclusion. It was totally bearable that I was shy and timid, aloof and maybe a little too profound. I was able to cope with having an enigmatic wit and a withdrawn instinct to always observe and never participate. As long as I had my sister, I could endure anything.
It seemed the differences fell away when we were together. We understood each other. We loved each other. We shared a room. We told each other secrets that the other had already sensed was hidden away. We were constantly aware of each other.
2007-11-25 13:00:05 · 13 answers · asked by ~S~ is for Stephanie! 6 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
When my sister Mila and I were sorted into different classes in kindergarten, I found myself using “we” and “us” instead of “I” or “me”. It was incredibly strange being a singular soul when I had grown up as a part of a larger, more collective being. I felt incomplete.
Twins run in my family, so the concept of one creature suddenly being two is not new to us. But when I hear that word, that precious word that defines who I am, I don’t think of definitions or scientific technicalities. A slideshow of names, dates, faces, and tiny random facts flashes before my eyes. My story is played. But my story as a twin did not begin when I was born, when I was given my name, or when I understood what a twin actually was. No, my story as a twin began generations ago, before my parents, grandparents, or their parents, were even born. Mila and I, our story is on a grander scale. Our story begins with another pair of sisters in our family, five generations ago.
2007-11-25 13:00:52 · update #1
Their names were Adelaide and Abigail, for whom Mila and I were given our middle names.
When we were small girls, we were told the story of Addy and Abbie, and often Mila and I liked to pretend we lived in that time. We wrote each other notes throughout the day and out them in an elaborately decorated wooden box, to be read by the other whenever they had time to check the “mailbox.” Our lives seemed to revolve around that wooden box. We checked it whenever possible, constantly filled it with our uncertain handwriting, and wondered about it all day.
Back then, so many years ago, it appeared the only thing Mila and I had in common with Addy and Abbie was the obvious fact that we were both sets of twins. What eluded us was the concept that their destiny was also ours. Their lives were entwined with our own. The only thing separating us from them was time, five generations of solid time perching
2007-11-25 13:01:20 · update #2
as an interval between two tales that would otherwise be one.
It is this story that I will tell you now, a story that I believe has been unsung for five generations too long. Maybe it’s happened before. Maybe I’m the person who needs to tell it. But in order to tell you our story, Abbie, Addy, Mila and I, and perhaps a thousand others, I’d have to also tell you another story. The story of how Mila Abigail LaBeau fell in love, and how I, Holly Adelaide LaBeau, her sister, watched.
2007-11-25 13:01:38 · update #3
Your introduction is a sound one! I like how it leads into the hook that grabs the reader.
As you continue with your story, concentrate on punctuation rules and try to avoid phrases or words that are repeated on the same page. One example that stands out is the word "five generations." Another is the word "other." See if you can use alternate descriptions of that short phrase and word so the reader won't develop irritations.
Otherwise, your story is fascinating and one that compels to be read.
2007-11-25 13:23:40 · answer #1 · answered by Guitarpicker 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Oh my goodness! This is fantastic... it's a real shame you don't have more.
The way you word everything is very professional and entrancing. You have a good way of drawing them in at the very beginning. I think that's the best idea because the amount of times I've dropped a book, because the first chapters were boring, is numberless.
It's also a good story idea. I would like to know if you have more! OR if you get it published, what it would be called. I really liked reading that. I want to be an author and so every chance I get to enjoy others' style of writing is great.
Fabulous! It was absolutely FABULOUS! From the first sentence to the cliff hanger of a last sentence!
PS You do have a few spelling errors and a few things that could be moved around, changed, or taken out that would make it sound better (Guitarpicker56 pointed out some). So far it's awesome, it just needs some combing through to make sure it all flows smoothly.
Good Luck and DEFINITLY email me some more! Even if it's not this story!
2007-11-26 07:27:26 · answer #2 · answered by Liz 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I like it very much. It's well written and has grabbed my attention so now I'm curious to read the rest. Twins have always fascinated me and I've always wondered what it would be like to have someone who looks exactly like me in the house. My girlfriend and I used to dress alike and tell people we were twins. One time, at a hamburger place, the owner gave us free hamburgers because we said we were twins and it was our birthday.
Keep on writing, you are very talented.
2007-11-25 13:11:24 · answer #3 · answered by CiCi 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I might propose finishing it with some thing tragic or some thing so that it will go away the characters considering. You wish some thing wherein if anybody is studying your publication and so they need to positioned it down, they wish to return again and hold studying to peer what occurs. Hope I helped
2016-09-05 14:21:23 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I absolutely love it!!!! I want more, I need more. This seems so interesting, the chapter really pulls the reader in. I'd love it if you would email me the story when it's finished.
2007-11-25 13:04:59 · answer #5 · answered by The Broken Doll 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I want more!!! It is the type of book I would love to read and hope you share more with us when you have some ready to share.
2007-11-25 15:20:50 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Yes! Very beautiful writing, I must say.
2007-11-25 13:15:09 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
YES!!!! i would love for you to email me or something when you are done- just when you become famous remember that dee gave you her input :)
2007-11-25 13:10:16 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I love it! You are very talented. Keep writing.
Let us know when you are done so we can read more.
2007-11-26 02:35:00 · answer #9 · answered by jamie a 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
ya! its really good that must of took a lot of effort to wright.
2007-11-25 13:04:37 · answer #10 · answered by Kyle T 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋