1. If Congress, the President, or any other person of higher power than the state government could do this, it would, in effect, disband the state militias.
2. Though, the police force exists to serve and protect others, they cannot always do this effectively because of the lack of officers on call at one time.
3. Though, there are some exceptions to the rule (those that are mentally challenged or just malignant should not have access to lethal weapons,) we, as a people, should always maintain the means to protect ourselves, our families, our homes and keep justice alive by resisting the federal government, by force if necessary.
2007-11-24 04:57:18 · 8 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
1. Congress is not a person. Try "entity".
2. No comma after though. The police force is not a "they"; they're an "it".
3. Again, no comma. There should be no comma within the parentheses; it should come right after the ). It's part of the main sentence, not the clause.
On a positive note: you are a lot sharper than a lot of professors, teachers, journalists and printing company workers out there. It's a pretty sad state of affairs.
2007-11-24 05:37:59 · answer #1 · answered by Arggg 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Corrected sentences...
1. If Congress, the President, or any other person of higher power than the state government could, it would disband the state militias.
2. Although the police force exists to serve and protect others, they cannot always do this effectively because of the lack of officers on call at one time.
3. Although there are some exceptions to the rule, we, as a people, should always maintain the means to protect ourselves, our families and our homes and to keep justice alive by resisting the federal government, by force if necessary.
Sentence 3 does not really require the segment in parenthesis but if you feel it is needed, (those that are mentally challenged or malignant should not have access to lethal weapons).
Hope this helps.
2007-11-24 05:12:02 · answer #2 · answered by the_vandalin 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
They could use some smoothing out---esp #3 too manny ideas crowed into one sentence
If the Congress,the President or any other power higher than the state government could do this , it would in effect disband the state militia.
Though the the police force exists to serve and protect, they cannot always be effective becasue of the number of officers on duty at a given time.
Although those who are mentally challenged or malicious should not have access to lethal weapons, the people should always maintain means to protect ourselves,our families,and our homes. We should maintain the means to keep justice alive through resisting federal government with force if necessary.
2007-11-24 12:56:39 · answer #3 · answered by klby 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
1) Your question is not correct. "ARE", not "aRE". Questions are sentences.
2) First sentence is correct. Some could legitimately argue that it should be "State Government" and "State Militias".
3) Second sentence is wrong if there is a comma after "Though". Delete the comma to make the sentence correct. "At any one time" would be better style, though not 'more correct'.
4) Sentence three.
a) Delete the comma after "though".
b) "Some exceptions" make the part within the brackets unnecessary.
c) "We, the people--". Not "we, as people--". "We" means "as people". "The people" reminds us that the whole sentence has the support of the Constitution.
d) "Federal Government".
e) A comma after "force" is better style.
2007-11-24 05:25:19 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
The only issue I had, other than the already stated "no comma after 'though'" is your use of vague pronouns in the first and second sentence. Any time you use "this, it, those," make sure you can pin point the antecedent (the word to which the pronoun refers) in the sentence.
Some of the corrections that were made by others, may have been made due to a lack of understanding of what your pronouns are referring to.
2007-11-24 06:02:29 · answer #5 · answered by sam 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
1. Correct
2. Lose the comma after "Though."
3. Lose the comma after "Though," the comma inside the parentheses, & add an and before "our homes."
2007-11-24 05:06:35 · answer #6 · answered by Calla 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Mother Bernard in Freshman English told us not to use parenthesis in formal writing. She said to find another way to get that information across because parenthesis makes it appear to be an afterthought.
2007-11-24 06:00:23 · answer #7 · answered by Debdeb 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Grammatically, yes, factually may be another matter.
2007-11-24 09:22:31 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋