i havent written anything in a long time and i just felt the urge to just now so please read and rate me out of 10 and tell me what you liked and didn't like... thank you.
in the start
i felt so numb
like a shock went through my system
paralyzing my very soul
but somehow...
i'm healing now...
i can feel my wings again
i never really knew
how much potential life had
to be so stressful beyond belief
but i felt it before
and i left it behind
because i knew
my soul was not a shelf
for such a heavy book
with too many pages to count
i used to think
i was so insignificant
but now i can see
the truth that you may not really love me
as much as a mother should
so i'll just ignore you too
and maybe you'll wake up and see
i'm not coming back home
cuz i sold your book
with all your lies
and i can start another life
with a blank page
a flyleaf dedicated to the ones who truly love me
with my wings finally able to fly
after so long
cuz it's all over for you
it's too late to say you're sorry
2007-11-23 08:36:27 · 11 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
i think its great! i like the metaphor with the bookshelf. clever!
i would rate it 7 or 8 out of 10 only because there wasnt much description that could have made it stronger and more intruiging.
this is a poem right ?(i just wanna make sure it's not a song, b/c then you could just disregard what i said)
2007-11-23 08:42:57 · answer #1 · answered by ♦GashlycrumbTiny♦ 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Congrats in finding the place to release the pain. I will give you an echoing 10.
2007-11-23 16:43:06 · answer #2 · answered by anecia777 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well it's good, but quite frankly, there's enough suicidal sounding people in the industry. I'll give you a 5. Sorry.
2007-11-23 16:41:07 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow thats really deep ,I like it
no one can possibly rate someones creativity
2007-11-23 16:45:18 · answer #4 · answered by #48 ♥'s YOU 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love the heart in it.
2007-11-23 16:40:51 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
That's deep. I like it. You should get into professional writing. If you haven't already, that is.
2007-11-23 16:39:32 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
I love it! Wow!
2007-11-23 16:40:14 · answer #7 · answered by Rain? 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You have some awesome talent....don't ever turn your back on it....
2007-11-23 16:42:58 · answer #8 · answered by dyingatwork 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Tracy..that's amazing..i dunno you could write a poem that amazing..maybe you should make this poem as a song..that'd be good..
good luck dear!!
2007-11-23 20:32:29 · answer #9 · answered by nadyah 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like it
*4u
2007-11-23 16:40:21 · answer #10 · answered by ♫ღ♥Samantha B™ 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋