is this a good poem?

Question

please be truthful. i can take the worst of comments.

she's the sadness in the shadows,
she's the sorrow in the rain;

she's the whisper in the wind,
through the worst of all the pain.

you'll never hear her laugh,
you'll never see her smile;

but sit within her presence,
she might just stay awhile.

after everything she's done for you,
after everything she's lost,
she still found time to help you,
no matter what the cost.

do not let this fool you,
she can and will not care.
she's only out to kill you,
she thinks it's only fair.

1) "she" is me,
2) i'm 11.

this poem is about me and how i feel.

Answer 1

Ghoulish! There is something deep in your writing, explore that more. Find the real message you are trying to share.

Best wishes.

Answer 2

That's deep and creepy. It sounds like you are speaking of someones shadow, and how they might feel after all the things you have made it do. That's really leaves a lot to the imagination. Very Good.

Answer 3

Do you even know what this poem is about? I sure don't........Sorry. Try to lighten up a little and try again...

Answer 4

who ever she is I doubt I would like to meet her, well worded
but to dark to be remembered.

Answer 5

WWWWOOOOOOWWWW. creepy.

Answer 6

awesome!!!!