Can someone help me with my story?

Question

I'm writing a story for school. It is a satire on how capitalism is a corrupt economic system. I need to use an extreme example of capitalism and I want it be symbolic and I need it so at the end they all live under a government that values equality. I need to know how that would happen.

vegaswoman, I'm not asking you to do my work. I need IDEAS. I need inspirations on how to start it.

Answer 1

Didn't Ayn Rand already write this?

Here's a story:

One day, Dwayne was walking through the city. Don't ask where he was coming from, it wasn't a drug deal. We'll say he was at the park. Dwayne is out of money at the moment, even though there is a lot of stuff in his pockets. No, his lack of money has nothing to do with what he was doing at the park. And no, he wasn't at the park because he dropped out of high school, even though he did drop out of high school.

He decides to get a job. He applies to a own a bank. The bank tells him that he cannot own the bank, because the system we live under does not allow people like Dwayne to own banks, just because he wants to. Now, by "people like Dwayne" of course I mean people that are poor, not people that didn't finish high school.

Dwayne is a little angry that he is not allowed to walk in off the street and own a million-dollar company. He tells his business associate at the park about this. Then he tells his business associate in the alley behind the liquor store about this. Then he tells a bunch of adult men who are playing basketball at 2 pm on a workday about this. Everyone tells everyone else about this, until it spreads to the entire country. Everyone decides to make a change. They all riot, and revolt, and then eventually, Dwayne is elected by the people to lead the country. Dwayne decides to make everyone equal. His first order of business is that, because everyone is equal and no man is better than another, he must step down as a Leader and abolish the government in place, because they have more power than non-government people, and we need to be equal. So now that there is no government, because government has power and everyone needs to have equal power, the country decends into anarchy. During this, Dwayne is killed. Eventually, a brutal person takes over, and under the guise of promoting the same kind of equality that Dwayne dreamed of, he begins systematically killing everyone until everyone in the country does his bidding. He bends the entire country to his will, and then builds some schools. He goes down in history as being a great man. The end.

Answer 2

Why don't you emancipate yourself from your parents and immigrate to a Socialist country. Then after living there for 20 or 30 years come back here and tell us all how great the experience truly was. Youth is wasted on the young.

Or better yet, try this. This is a simplified example of what would happen if we switched from capitalism to socialism. And it's in terms that you, a naive child, can understand..."BEER"

Bar Stool Economics

Suppose that every day, ten men go out for a couple of beers and the bill for all ten comes to $100. If they paid their bill the way we pay our taxes according to our current tax structure, it
would go something like this:

The first four men (the poorest) would pay nothing.
The fifth would pay $1.
The sixth would pay $3.
The seventh would pay $7.
The eighth would pay $12.
The ninth would pay $18.
The tenth man (the richest) would pay $59.

So, that's what they decided to do.

The ten men drank in the bar every day and seemed quite happy with the
arrangement, until on day, the owner threw them a curve. "Since you are
all such good customers," he said, "I'm going to reduce the cost of
your daily bar bill by $20."Drinks for the ten now cost just $80.

The group still wanted to pay their bill the way we pay our taxes so
the first four men were unaffected. They would still drink for free.
But what about the other six men - the paying customers? How could they
divide the $20 windfall so that everyone would get his 'fair share?'
They realized that $20 divided by six is $3.33. But if they subtracted
that from everybody's share, then the fifth man and the sixth man would
each end up being paid to drink his beer. So, the bar owner suggested
that it would be fair to reduce each man's bill by roughly the same
percentage of total of what he had been paying, and he proceeded to work out the amounts each should pay.

And so:

The fifth man, like the first four, now paid nothing (100% savings).
The sixth now paid $2 instead of $3 (33%savings).
The seventh now pay $5 instead of $7 (28%savings).
The eighth now paid $9 instead of $12 (25% savings).
The ninth now paid $14 instead of $18 (22% savings).
The tenth now paid $49 in stead of $59 (16% savings).

Each of the six was better off than before. And the first four
continued to drink for free. But once outside the restaurant, the men
began to compare their savings.

"I only got a dollar out of the $20,"declared the sixth man. He pointed
to the tenth man," but he got $10!"

"Yeah, that's right," exclaimed the fifth man. "I only saved a dollar,
too. It's unfair that he got ten times more than I!"

"That's true!!" shouted the seventh man. "Why should he get $10 back
when I got only two"

"The rich get all the breaks!"

"Wait a minute," yelled the first four men in unison. "We didn't get
anything at all. The system exploits the poor!"

The nine men surrounded the tenth and beat him up.

The next night the tenth man didn't show up for drinks, so the nine sat
down and had beers without him.

But when it came time to pay the bill, they discovered something
important. They didn't have enough money among them all for even
half of the bill!

And that, boys and girls, journalists and college professors, is how
our tax system works. The people who pay the highest taxes get the most
benefit from a tax reduction. Tax them too much, attack them for being
wealthy, and they just may not show up anymore. In fact, they might
start drinking overseas where the atmosphere is somewhat friendlier, or
not reinvest in the community.

David R. Kamerschen, Ph.D.
Professor of Economics
University of Georgia

Answer 3

HA! I found you, JJ! (Even after you set your profile to private, I knew what section to find you in because your questions are so darn repetitive.) Anyways, I may be able to help you with this. (Seriously.) Have you ever seen "Charlie the Unicorn"? The same guy who made that made a hilarious flash vid called "The Cloak". It kind of makes fun of both sides. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rfPriP4P3-A
The Cloak is like this extreme Capitalist guy. He's AWESOME, (just watch the darn thing.) You could start out your paper describing a scene from "The Cloak" and then say something like, "The Cloak may seem extreme in his Capitalist ways, but it's not a far stretch from the actual "Axe of Capitalism" that is thrown into the face of the poor, blah, blah, blah...." (You won't get the Axe thing unless you watch it.) You know I don't agree with you and your whole communist thing, but in all seriousness, I think you could use that video. Good luck! (I can't believe I just did that. o_O)
EDIT: LOL at what the guy below me posted. You rock. =D
EDIT2: joey1305, that was AWESOME. You rule, and the guy who originally wrote that rules, simply awesome. =D

Answer 4

Sorry... JJ... I do not agree with the premise of your "story." I do not believe capitalism to be the EVIL that you view it as.

You are so enamored of communism, that you are blinded to the truth of the facts.

You say you need to know how capitalism can experience a "demise" that would eventually transform it into communism ("live under a government that values equality")... well... it cannot happen, at least not peacefully.

I wish you luck in attempting your story, but don't foresee much success, because your basic premises are fallacious, implausible, and impossible to occur.


Have a right-wing day.

Answer 5

If you want to get ahead in life, you can start by not asking others to do your research for you. Laziness would be an attribute of a communist society.

Your starting point is research on capitalism, not opinions on a random message board. You will get some pretty off the wall statements here. Better to form your own opinions and your own story from your own research.

Answer 6

I am going to refrain, and not say the first thing that came to mind after I read your question. So, I'll say this. Do your own research, and maybe, just maybe, your satire end alittle different than you now want it to.....good luck

Answer 7

Capitalism has transcended governmental systems in a transformational process.The boarders are coming down,at the same time the earnest pace at which we persevere is the artificial feature that encompasses any invasive procedure.

Answer 8

Just look around you now.
The laissez faire approach of the Bush administration has resulted in moderate growth but at the expense of our children who will be forced to pay for out reckless debt accumulation.
This growth has not reached most in the economy with poverty increasing and median wages falling over Bush's term. The housing bubble bursting, along with corporate disgraces such as Enron, has seen many lose thier only real assets and savings. And all the time our government has the nerve to boast about its economic record.

As for the result - hopefully this election will produce a more compassionate and caring government - we just have to wait and see.

Answer 9

Go to a different school!

Answer 10

Tsk-tsk trolling a again.....where my ..... .Y ur party stole f om my family.By the way do you pick your answers?Or just to busy trolling.