Should I include "In spite of this" or not?

Question

His family has struggled in poverty, In spite of this he continued to work diligently in school.

If yes, then still give me another example that I can add instead of "In spite of this."

Please give me your idea.

Thank you.

Answer 1

it's a really awkwardly phrased statement.

you can include "in spite of this" because it makes sense. however, you have a comma instead of either a semicolon or period.

in replacement of "in spite of this," you could use "despite this" or "nevertheless"

Answer 2

Poverty and working diligently in school do not have anything whatsoever to do with one another. I raised three children below the federal poverty level. All are college graduates. For many, including my family, being poor motivates children to excel at school in hopes of raising their standard of living. Your whole sentence is based on a bogus assumption.

Grammatically, your sentence is incorrect. It should be two sentences, and the structure needs to be fixed so that both sentences match in tense. "His family struggled in poverty. In spite of this, he continued to work diligently in school." Your assumption that poor people don't do well in school is still shaky, but at least the grammar is now correct.

Answer 3

"In spite of this ..." literally means, "even though he had that problem it didn't hold him down, in fact ..."


Are you wanting to say that it MADE him work diligently
or ...
Are you saying it is known that poverty-stricken people have a hard time working diligently
... it makes a big difference to the sentence!


... also, be careful you are mixing your tenses (has struggled) is past-present and "he continued" is past.
... also, did he have a "job" at school or do you mean to say he "studied diligently"
... also, you don't struggle "in poverty" .. try "His family was poverty-stricken, ..." or "his family has struggled in a state of poverty"
... also, the word "continued" gives the sense that he is continuing after his family "got poor .. so if he didnt work diligently before they became poor, OR if the family has always been poor you have to change the word "continued" to something like "became" or "started"

Answer 4

You definitely shouldn't write it that way. Technically, the word "this" can't act as a subject. It can only function as an adjective, so it should be followed by a noun. Some teachers might let you get away with that, but you should revise it just in case.

Say something like...

Despite his family's financial difficulties, he had no problem continuing to work diligently in school.

Answer 5

I would consider combining the two sentences. Also, you shift verb tenses from the first to the second sentence. Just keep both verbs simple past tense. Ex.- His family struggled in poverty, yet he continued to work diligently in school. Or- Despite his family's poverty, he continued to work diligently in school.

Answer 6

His family struggled in poverty. Bob continued to work diligently in school, his eye set on the prize....

Answer 7

even though he had setbackswith his background