"The mysteriousness of ink"
Taking up the forgotten pen
Drawing lines of black across my arms
Tracing edges of leaves, petals, stems
To form a group of roses
An area of darkness amid pale skin
The mass appears to absorb into my pores
Becoming a part of me
Skin with ink
Mixing with the unknown
From the point of the pen
More ink emerges
The black changes to form
Reds, greens, purples, yellows, blues…
Amid these colors
Two particularly stand out
Reds and greens dribble
Down the contours in my skin
To collect in the center of my arms
Mixing together
Separating to form
The green of the leaves, the stems
The red of the petals
An abundance of roses
Seductive, lustrous, lively
On the skin of my arms
2007-11-21 11:40:02 · 16 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Well, it is beautifully written .... but of course, we all know that you are like a rose ... perfect and timeless in your own way ...
2007-11-21 11:43:51 · answer #1 · answered by william_wraithe 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Interesting. I have not read your earlier work. The interest of it is stained a little by the cautionary voice in my head that wonders if drawing on yourself in that much ink could cause some sort of damage...but that voice is my problem ;).
The idea of flowing art and ink mixed with body imagery is very seductive. Is it art or tatoo, we wonder.
2007-11-21 11:47:29 · answer #2 · answered by Amy R 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well, its not bad. I liked it, with a couple of readings, one cannot get everything out of one poem without multiple readings, out loud and in one's head. For me, I like economy of words. Sometimes just the barest of words can still get across the essence, and not distract. The first line is okay, it sets the overall tone (tone is important) and then I would have only written "lines of black across my arm" and shaved a few other words, also. But overall its good. Also as a precaution you need to not make your stuff so public. Someone else can steal it, make it theirs, and not have to sweat for it, which is bad.
2007-11-21 11:48:44 · answer #3 · answered by vlafond@sbcglobal.net 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Interesting!
2007-11-21 11:43:27 · answer #4 · answered by ? 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Omg you are a great poem writer!
2007-11-21 11:43:35 · answer #5 · answered by Got milk? 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Really good
2007-11-21 11:48:29 · answer #6 · answered by lilly 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I find it kind of Deep! I like it, you sho your true feelings.
2007-11-21 11:43:33 · answer #7 · answered by Lyss Lyss;; 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Too long
2007-11-21 11:43:04 · answer #8 · answered by Stefano 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like it. Very interesting componets!
2007-11-21 11:43:35 · answer #9 · answered by Confused ~ 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
sorry it sounds a little disturbing to me.
2007-11-21 11:43:43 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋