And to the looking glass this ode
into which I see
The mirror, creature so profound
reflecting... me.
Yet 'tis an image, nothing more
though how precise it be
How is it that a thing of stone
can show so clearly, me?
Oh such a magic must it hold
or curiosity
Quietly observing all
then showing it to me.
But more to I than meets the eye
I'm more than you can see
And thus the mirror, seeing all
still knows not of me.
Perceives without, yet of within
not so easily
Reflects it all but nothing still
least of all, of me.
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Comment on whatever you wish- the message, the rhyme scheme, the meter, why the heck I would write a poem about a mirror, etc, but please do comment- I am eager for feedback.
2007-11-20 10:18:07 · 4 answers · asked by Tricia 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Yeah, I know it's not necessarily about a mirror- Extended metaphor-type things are common in my poetry.
2007-11-20 10:23:58 · update #1
Don't worry about offending me- I want an honest opinion. That's why I posted it here. ^^
2007-11-20 10:25:17 · update #2
very nice. it truly was a good poem. it starts out slow, but picks up toward the end. i like the 4th stanza. work on the 2nd stanza some. it seems to convey some odd metaphor i guess. what about the stony image? talk about that some more maybe. very good. what's it called?
2007-11-20 10:31:51 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
why this is not a poem about a mirror at all.It is very very good.You should be proud of yourself for this one..and you should write to your heart's content.You are truly talented.
2007-11-20 10:22:23 · answer #2 · answered by berlytea 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
this is really beautiful- it is a style not so commently utilized in modern poems!
2007-11-20 10:20:57 · answer #3 · answered by Mercutia 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its straight
2007-11-20 10:21:04 · answer #4 · answered by polk-dotz 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋