A poem of redemption denied. please let me know your thoughts?

Question

bleeding trees

Endless, mindless agony is running,
From out my bloodshot eyes.
Standing on a frozen lake,
A lake of my own icy tears.

The first light of spring,
The dark gloom of winter.
All of it has been for real,
Except for the death of fall.

Her body long forgotten,
Covered up by rotting leaves,
On the banks I cry for you,
On the banks of the bleeding trees.

The snow whips my depression,
You pass away before my very eyes.
I have never really understood,
Why you doubt my deep and trusting love.

Answer 1

Beautiful poem, I can feel the honesty of your emotions expressed here. But you'll have to understand, doubt comes with love, and it means fear of being betrayed; it is not easy to trust someone, and let oneself exposed to the danger of betrayal and hurt and pain...

Answer 2

Oh This is such a sad and full of pain poem; and i love all of the beautiful words you wrote so full of sorrow; the one i liked best is her body long forgotten ;covered by rotting leaves ; on the banks i cry for you' on the banks of the bleeding tree;s.After reading this it makes my heart want to bleed for you; and your pain too., great ; great poem,,,,,,,,

Answer 3

Oh that made me so sad. You know you have a really good way of expressing dark poetry, I love it!! The death of a person and the love of that person in another's heart but the person who died denied that other person's love for her. Oh and how that person felt when the one he loved died.!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Oh you are really good!!! Can you listen to mine? -_-

Answer 4

it sounds imcomplete.. but the poem itself is great. The personification is amazingly done, I feel as if i'm there, with you. but powerless to change the mood.

Answer 5

it is very very lovely