just to sleep
now
no emotions,
to clog the mind,
to put into words,
just rest,
to rest is something ,
that the mind,
can not define.
2007-11-19 05:17:39 · 6 answers · asked by dorian 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
it is a bit plain
2007-11-20 07:47:27 · answer #1 · answered by unknown 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very true, and it makes me sleepy. I also see that as a haven where nothing else from the world can intervene and distract you. I agree with the message of the poem and I like the very tired feel that the words hold. It's like one last meditation before you fall asleep. Beautiful imagery.
2007-11-19 06:00:03 · answer #2 · answered by Evadne Soleil 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
the priority is your poem is merely too long. it style of feels forced and contrived. merely write hi on somewhat paper and hand it to her. Or draw somewhat smiley face on the backside of the subsequent to-do checklist you provide her. do no longer you already sign her examine besides? What else does she want from you?
2016-11-12 02:35:44 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's easy to draw great line pictures with a torn and tattered soul. You have the gift.
TD
2007-11-19 07:45:54 · answer #4 · answered by TD Euwaite? 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
But in dreamscape
Words are nothing
Rest is but a breath
in the life and death cycle
Of our eternal soul
2007-11-19 09:30:19 · answer #5 · answered by steven m 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
there's so much we feel yet words cannot describe.... so true...
i like your poem very much, i'd rate it 10 out of 10
2007-11-19 07:04:43 · answer #6 · answered by Analyst 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋