SOOTHING SMOOTHIES
so stressed?
speak silence!
search stillness.
stay solemn.
seek sincerity.
seize serenity.
shoot for sierra.
sink into siesta.
succumb to solitude.
seek out shelter.
search for seclusion.
start sensing.
savor sushi.
see sunrise.
sense sensibility.
2007-11-19 01:25:48 · 11 answers · asked by Dark Dickinsonian 4 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Why be stressed
When you can sit back,
Waiting in the shade
While the gentle breeze comes.
Worries will melt
With the weighing of facts.
What for are you stressing
When you can relax...?
2007-11-19 08:09:30 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 3⤊ 0⤋
There is quite a bit of irony in this poem, it begs the question of what to do when you are stressed and offers some good advice and some bad advice. Stress should not entail shooting of any kind nor should you succumb to stress, but siesta's and sunrises might help. Overall, good tight poem!
2007-11-19 14:44:46 · answer #2 · answered by Danny 1 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Interesting words to work with, now dig deeper in to
expession of what it means to you, what does the seeking mean to you, etc. Bring out your feelings, seems like you can write some thing powerful with these thopughts of pondering,
it reads as a draft, not a poem.
BUT, that is only my mere opinion. good luck!
2007-11-19 09:56:47 · answer #3 · answered by jenny 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Nice. I like TD's answer, made me smile. I like your poem and while I can follow along with it, I am not sure of what your message is as a whole. But I do like the way it reads. Seems to have a flow about it.
2007-11-19 10:14:39 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
Hi i dont know weather i can answer the question properly but as far as my answer goes i say that u need a best friend to share ur feeling. even though u have thousands of friends u'll be lonely among them its like a lonely pretty butterfly caught ina prison with thousands of ugly things. better go for a honest n a good friend then u'll get all the things in ur question................................. sorry if any way i've hurt ur feelings...................
chow......................................
2007-11-19 10:44:59 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
All good except for the raw fish. Spurn sushi.
2007-11-19 16:54:22 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Good work, Moonbelle! And I love your last line, which sums it all up nicely.
xxx
2007-11-19 13:06:33 · answer #7 · answered by Lady Annabella-VInylist 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Very good! Unless you try to read it while eating crackers...
2007-11-19 09:34:53 · answer #8 · answered by TD Euwaite? 6 · 5⤊ 0⤋
well my dear,you got me here....??????? I'll be honest with you like allways, I don't get it??? good luck Baby,Baby :?
2007-11-19 17:16:14 · answer #9 · answered by ? 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
sssssensational
2007-11-19 16:12:10 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋