rate my poem, its about my dog, i loved her soo much.?

Question

For you,
my watchguard, my friend.
though you are gone,
you will be remembered till the end.

So it's cutains to you,
a personality like a buffoon, and strength like a snowplow.
now I saw my final words,
while you take your final bow.

So it's curtains to you,
you are my breath of fresh air, and the loyal and the dependable.
so just go away, I'm done,
though you are still with me, like a cookie, you crumble.

Still, it's curtains to you,
"good girl," you've caught the frisbee.
always watching us in my room.
parting the deceased, it's not so easy.

With your tremendous tickling, and tasting tongue,
snooping around like a pirate searching for treasure.
Yes, it's curtains to you,
always beside me forever.

No, you can't leave,
not with your boogying booty and beautiful ears.
Don't let the curtains close,
not even through all these years.

Is it kinda girly for a 13 year old guy?
cant finish cause i don't have enough space.
i'll add the rest in details

Some words to you,
I'll remember you, only if you do now and then.
I realize finally it's curtains to you,
my emotions continue to deepen.

Now, my buddy,
realize this world was your curtain
you can now exceed the old,
on the threshold of anew.
the curtains close quickly, you must go,
my dog, you were great, and I'm very proud of you.

Answer 1

pretty awful actually. it is trite and sentimental.

Answer 2

No, it's not girly.

I'm sorry about your dog. This is a beautiful eulogy for her.

I like "personality like a buffoon, and strength like a snowplow." You really hit on something when you say that "parting the deceased" is not easy. And the word "parting" has connotations of "departed," so it is quite fitting here.

Thanks.

Answer 3

This would work better in the form of a letter: "Farewell Letter to my Dog."

Answer 4

-cries-

SAD! -cries some more-
SO SAD -sobs some more-

Girly? Not at all! It's very -sniffle- touching...

Answer 5

your dog hated you...so stop the drama.