I sit alone to think of life, and ponder what to do.
To wait for just the perfect man, or share it now with you.
Protected from the world around, I've kept it close to me.
I want to know what other's feel, I wish this thing to be.
Afraid of what is sure to come, but longing stirs me deep.
To feel what women everywhere, have dreamed of in their sleep.
For since the world began it's spin, it's been a fact of life.
This thing has been the cause of wars, a constant source of strife.
I wonder if this fear I feel, will cease when I give in.
The fear my life forever more, might crave this lovely sin.
The men I know all say to me, "My dear, let me be first".
My mind and heart are now at odds, my body feels the thirst.
A longing in the depths of me, to know pure ecstacy.
Fights battles long within my mind, which says it's not for me.
I've felt this way for many years, and tears I've shed my share.
When i say no to all the men, they feel that I don't care.
2007-11-18 11:24:01 · 8 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
They tell me that they love me true, but when I tell them no,
They never seem to stay around, and cause my love to grow.
I've saved myself for all these years, for just the special one.
I cannot give myself to these, just for their carnal fun.
But still I long to know the joy, of what so many feel.
But cannot give myself away, unless the love is real.
To share my body and my soul, a goal I have in mind.
Will only happen when a man, Who love me true, I find.
Until that day, I'll sit and think, of joys I've not yet found.
But when it comes, I won't lay still, or utter not a sound.
2007-11-18 11:24:16 · update #1
Arianna and Dondi.
2 beautiful answers from 2 beautiful people.
2007-11-18 11:47:13 · update #2
Blow me away next time. Awesome piece of poetry. Best I can tell, it's iambic hectometer. Beautifully done. And to answer your question, you should not. There is someone out here who will respect you enough to honor you, for love is built upon respect and honor. It's so rare to find a girl your age who still hasn't, that I recommend you stay yourself, and let the guys look for you. I was my wife's first, and she waited 41 years. Good luck and again, great writing.
2007-11-18 11:43:07 · answer #1 · answered by Dondi 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Your poem is lovely to read. I enjoy the steady rhythm. Your first line does a great job of showing what the poem will be about - pondering.
I don't feel the conflict when I read this. I mean conflict within the poem, not about the topic. I get the sense that the narrator is quite sure what to do, even though she has pangs of doubt.
Hang on a second, while I climb waaay out on this limb. . .
Your short profile shows a very interesting conflict. You put your physical stats right at the top, then follow it with a warning rhyme. A come look/ don't touch dichotomy that I think a lot of women and girls feel. I think this would be really cool to see in a poem, something with some indecision, or ambivalence, some space the reader can explore.
Off the limb now.
Edit: Oh, if you're actually asking "Should I?" then, obviously only when you're ready. There's no good reason to do it before then.
2007-11-18 21:49:30 · answer #2 · answered by aggylu 5 · 2⤊ 0⤋
The longing is natural..but the joy only lasts when it's given to someone who's true..I gave in to temptation to the man that I loved..A man who turned out to be great at manipulation. He got what he wanted and still left—Don't give in to those who are going to get it and leave or to those who are going to leave when they don't get it...I can only wonder if it would have been worth the wait, but I'm almost certain it would have been..Very nice poem.
2007-11-18 20:07:38 · answer #3 · answered by Renae Anne 2 · 2⤊ 0⤋
nice poem, you have a sense of rhyme and meter
a nice description of what you feel
but there are many statements which do not qualify for poetry
I'm a common guy though
it seems you use poetry to describe your intimate feelings, poetry as a niche,
2007-11-18 19:59:50 · answer #4 · answered by Theta40 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
What a great poem! I've read bad poem after bad poem and yours is truly refreshing!
2007-11-18 22:03:44 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
there are plenty who believe as you do, that you should wait. and if they are going to leave you because you said no. they would have left you because you said yes.
its best to wait. i believe so, and so does my love. we both have, and we both will. there is a person out there that respects your decision and that is the person for you.
2007-11-18 19:34:00 · answer #6 · answered by Arianna 3 · 2⤊ 0⤋
What in the hell? Is this supposed to be a question? I mean, awesome poem, but... dude. x_x
2007-11-18 19:48:21 · answer #7 · answered by ♥-&&-αηηα-&&-♥ 3 · 1⤊ 1⤋
i believe that it's best that you shouldn't. wait for him :D
anyway nice poem. liked the rhythm. :D
2007-11-19 05:27:12 · answer #8 · answered by -"CuRiOuS CaT"- 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋