Everything is black
When you open your eyes
so wide that you could tear its sides
Still you see nothing...
everything is black...
How much fear can you handle?
rub them so hard till they bleed!
Still you see nothing...
Everything is black...
How much would you be terrified?
when all else suddenly seemed to collide?
Can you handle the confusion?
Shun your eyes that tears fall on its own
Wishing none of it was real...
Lift up those lids...pray to see...to see..
pray to heal...
this isn't real...! !
Still you see nothing...
Everything is black...
2007-11-17 21:27:26 · 13 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
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here..you can have mine
*TOGOINKS!
2007-11-17 21:42:38 · update #1
Is "Everything Black" or is it the "fear that cannot be handled" that keeps the light from shining within, to reach the retina of the eye, and take the strain away? What are you "wishing none of it was real" ? The fear, The Pain, The Darkness, The Blindness? Can you handle "Everything Being Black" or Do you need Someone to "Shine" some light in?
Poem is Self-Exclamatory, but chills the soul...
2007-11-18 13:27:21 · answer #1 · answered by ? 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I like the device you used this time--asking questions, rather than telling something. This device makes the reader think about what he/she would do in a situation of extreme fear and focuses their attention on the poet's answers to the questions.
2007-11-18 09:08:19 · answer #2 · answered by Elaine P...is for Poetry 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
You must ration every ounce of your passion, otherwise it will crash-and, burn-at every turn. Inside these walls I'm in solitude, Trying to escape the multitude, and the attitude of those who think they are.... and it's duly noted; but thier insides are corroded. The Dynomite is loaded. but it is too late If I've already exploded!
2007-11-18 05:59:36 · answer #3 · answered by Blaze.of.Glory 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yeah, it's allright. All your poems seem like poems someone I know named Sasha would write.
2007-11-19 00:43:07 · answer #4 · answered by noone 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Don't know about allright, it seems it's all black and confused :-)
But the poem is well-written, I like your style.
2007-11-18 09:44:16 · answer #5 · answered by Analyst 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It is good a bit dark at some places but yeah its of good quality.
2007-11-18 05:33:47 · answer #6 · answered by starrynight 4 · 1⤊ 1⤋
it makes me think this is how you feel .i so much understand it . sometimes it is a black world ..
2007-11-19 07:30:01 · answer #7 · answered by Snuggles 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
repeating couple phrases too much. i know you intended to but maybe lessen the amount.
other than that it sounds pretty great :)
keep working at it !
2007-11-18 05:31:03 · answer #8 · answered by robotxcharm 1 · 3⤊ 2⤋
Can I borrow that hammer?
Maybe if some decent emotions were being displayed, I wouldn't mind it being "emo".
2007-11-18 05:38:03 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 3⤋
That is so beautifull it gave me goose bumps all over ........... chin up sweet heart, good things really do happen to good people ........... I've got a feeling you are one of the really good ones!!
CHEERS
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2007-11-18 05:32:06 · answer #10 · answered by Minx 7 · 3⤊ 2⤋