I made this poem if anyone asks.
Days of sadness
There was no light
Till I found you
My only candle in the darkest of night
You showed me a world I never knew.
My world stopped when you said " I love you".
So my days of sorrow
I thought were gone
But then you left.
Did I do something wrong?
I'm all alone again
And here I shall stay.
Till I find somebody
Who can be my candle
And again
Light my way
2007-11-17 19:46:34 · 10 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Deep, I love that! All my poems have to have feeling and soul. It should Cry out and stand out like yours. I do think the last line can be improved. I read it & it flowed until I hit "and again light my way" I think if you were to delete again, and replace it with another word, anywhere in the line, you would have it completed......let me think
...I'm all alone again, and here I shall stay, 'till I find somebody to be my candle and come and light my way............(do you like that? Only a suggestion, maybe you can Think of something even better)
*Beautiful*
2007-11-17 21:07:09 · answer #1 · answered by Blaze.of.Glory 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think that it is a very beautiful poem. There is sadness in it yet there is the hope of regaining that which was lost. That which you are seeking, that light which shall light your way and never forsake thee is Jesus Christ. For the light which comes from the candle of man can be easily blown out and you will be left standing in the darkness often, but if you have the light of the world inside you, you will shine like the sun and you will then light the way for others. Be the light and let your light so shine instead of standing around waiting for a person to come along and light your way for this I assure you they may often lead you astray.
2007-11-17 20:13:11 · answer #2 · answered by Gabriel 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
For me a poem has to have rhythm. It does not always ought to rhyme nevertheless it demands to hit my feelings. I believe readability of expression is principal as good. I do not love to moment wager what I'm studying approximately. I constantly seem for what I time period "poetic gemstones"within the textual content.
2016-09-05 08:07:59 · answer #3 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I read it aloud as soon as I saw it.
Very sweet. Almost sounds like a professional writer like dickens wrote it. Bravo!!!!!
2007-11-17 19:58:57 · answer #4 · answered by darcyaf1 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
the poem itself is lovely ...but the last part ...it gives me the impression that it is not about love but infatuation.
2007-11-17 21:06:01 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
aaaawww how sad =[
But it's heaps good though =]
2007-11-17 20:00:48 · answer #6 · answered by ♫ 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
cute
~totaly in love~
2007-11-18 09:15:17 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's simple and ok
2007-11-17 19:53:22 · answer #8 · answered by Theta40 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think its pretty awesome =]
2007-11-17 20:09:47 · answer #9 · answered by ♥§o contagiou§♥ 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its ok
2007-11-17 19:54:57 · answer #10 · answered by darlin 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋