Wat do you think of this short passage?

Question

55 Seconds

Peace, is 55 seconds long, each time
Of quietness, deafening yet gentle
Its cold, always cooler
Than life, than sensibility, than responsibility
Its never long enough
To cry, to reveal your sorrow
Or to force yourself otherwise

It touches your body like caress
Like millions of particles gently consuming you
And if you move
It follows you, keeping tab
Longing to be one with you, eternally

For 55 seconds, you play with her
You fly, you forget your sorrow
You were someone else, something else
You are free
Limited only by your imagination

At the end of it, you return to life
You surface, only to miss those short times
You dread where you are now
As noise of the world thunder in your ears
And reality grabs you by the beating heart
You preferred your peace
And wished it could be eternal

So you dive again
To find your 55 seconds
And to fly among them
The cold, lightness, and the caress
And the peace
Who wants to be with you forever
And ever
But not yet


Its about swimming...

Answer 1

I had to read it twice, because at first i didn't realize it was about swimming until about half way through, but when i read it the second time it was really good. The descriptive language is excellent, you can really imagine what is happening, it feels like you are there, feeling the emotion of the person in the water.
Did you write it?

Answer 2

Didn't even make it through the whole thing. To me a poem should rhyme and have rhythm.

Answer 3

its not short