With a pounding heart I review the situations; bases loaded, one out, and we are clinging to a two run lead that at one time was seven runs; all we need is these two outs and we are in the championship game.
2007-11-17 13:47:50 · 5 answers · asked by SuperStation 1 in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
With a pounding heart I review the situations, with bases loaded, and one out, we are clinging to a two run lead that at one time was seven runs. All we need are these two outs, and we are in the championship game.
That's my suggestion for improving it :D
2007-11-17 13:56:46 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i would go with:
{With a pounding heart I review the situation: bases loaded, one out, and we are clinging to a two run lead that at one time was seven. All we need is these two outs and we are in the championship game.
that's my suggestion
might not be completely right, but close =]
2007-11-17 21:54:06 · answer #2 · answered by jessejames32 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
The other answers are good, but two run lead should be two-run lead.
2007-11-17 22:22:24 · answer #3 · answered by eris 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I would change the semicolon after "situations" to a colon and make "situation" singular; otherwise it looks OK to this retired English professor.
2007-11-17 22:42:25 · answer #4 · answered by aida 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
My heart is pounding as I contemplate.......
2007-11-17 21:53:03 · answer #5 · answered by Faith D 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋