For Mom
the foul stench of your putrid flesh
haunting me even in my little death
You were there lounging on deathbed
The hideous smell of rotten eggs
Room darkens with hate and gore
Raw wounds exposed to the core
I can barely breathe...I abhorred...you
I am sorry...
I should be guilty...
2007-11-16 21:40:26 · 29 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
why are you all so lame? my mom suffered from leprosy! fools! and i had to live with her!! she's dead already!!
Grow some brains...or hearts..wutever!
2007-11-16 21:54:25 · update #1
Why do you keep on posting poems that you know many will not comprehend?
For approval?
But does it even matter?
As an artist...No
As a human...Maybe
I have seen a couple of your poems and I really think they're beautiful. Yahoo Answers is not a place for you my dear. People here won't understand.
2007-11-16 23:01:23 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 4⤊ 0⤋
It's a shame when someone can not answer honestly about how they feel about someone close to them in a poetry section. I think this poem is great, as usual. Probably I would love to see a little more imagery (i like word pictures) maybe a bit more of am exploration of the why you should feel guilty bit. However all in great and at least your trying to push the boundaries a bit and it is almost amusing some of the responses you have got accusing you of being sick, etc! However I did like the answer when the person was trying to be unbiased and look at writing from a reaction to the words. Just for the record I don't have a mum like this!
2007-11-17 08:08:19 · answer #2 · answered by waggy 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Love and hatred are separated by a very thin line. We often feel anger and even hatred for someone we loved who has left us through death. Then, we either feel guilt and remorse or guilt because we can't feel remorse. This is what it means to be human; conflicting feelings that take a long time to resolve, if ever. My grandfather passed away after a long illness and I couldn't cry for a month. I hated myself for not feeling anything, but eventually realized that I hadn't been ready to grieve because I really loved him so much. This may not be your case, but it's the same sort of confusion of emotions. Death DOES haunt us; time doesn't always heal, but eventually we come to some sort of terms with our loss.
2007-11-17 07:30:02 · answer #3 · answered by Elaine P...is for Poetry 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Uh,oh. It ain't fair to condemn the answerers before me...because your poem without being supplied with the true context of your Mom being sick with leprosy they were naturally inclined to think the way they just did.
I'm sorry both that you had to undergo taking care of your Mom that way and that she's already dead now.
I love my Mom in her old age, thankfully not with leprosy.
2007-11-17 11:03:05 · answer #4 · answered by Lance 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
All right, I'm responding blind. Meaning, I looked at no other responses, nor your history. My first reaction is to look at the picture you provide and I find myself feeling sorry for a poor little girl who does not understand the death and decaying process. Had I not looked at your picture, my gut reaction would be to think that you are a bitter son. I still don't know which one you are but I do know that you are disturbed. Do seek some help dear to process this. Do you have insurance? If so, seek some help. They'll ask what is your reason for seeking help? Just tell them you are depressed over your Mother's death. If you do not have insurance, call your local hospice and ask to speak to the bereavement counselor. All hospice personnel have smelled death over and over again. It is nothing new to them. Talk to them. It is a federal agency and it is free.
2007-11-17 05:55:03 · answer #5 · answered by julie b 5 · 2⤊ 3⤋
Ok first, the poem is moderately good. The rhyming is ok but not great. The imagery is very good. Second, I'm not here to judge you about the way you feel like others here are. I'm here to look at your poetry, like other people should. Don't listen to them. Take care.
2007-11-17 06:02:59 · answer #6 · answered by 'Mojo' 2 · 4⤊ 0⤋
Very Black writing but it's really good. My Dad beat my mom to death when I was 81/2 while I watched and I started writing what I called Black writings but it got my anger out. Sorry you had to go through all that. Sincerely Michele
2007-11-17 07:21:16 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 6⤊ 0⤋
That wasn;t really your mom with all the sores; it was a shell of her..My mom suffered Thur cancer and i smell death everyday when she was alive; but i know it was nothing she could do to help her predicament; but i still think ; and cry for her daily as she was my rock..
2007-11-17 06:11:53 · answer #8 · answered by Cami lives 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
It is perfectly understandable to hate what is happening, how it looks, how it smells, how incapable you are of doing anything about it. So of course everything she has ever done wrong or badly, everything you resent about your relationship surfaces. You are learning about the fragility of humanity and how easy it is to respond to natural inclinations instead of challenging your thinking. Try separating all your experiences with her. Maybe look at how others close to you both are responding. This is so very difficult and the more you challenge the difficulty the less energy you will have for anger and guilt.
2007-11-17 05:50:00 · answer #9 · answered by hartparris49 1 · 0⤊ 3⤋
They muck you up your mum and dad, they may not mean to but they do.
They fill you up with faults they had and add some extra just for you.
But they where mucked up in there turn by old style folks all stub urn and stern.
The war and lost hope they where given for one day god will forgive when risen
2007-11-17 05:47:01 · answer #10 · answered by Felix 2 · 1⤊ 3⤋