According To Him (The Jackass)
Written by Semper Fi Reborn
According to that jackass,
You live with,
You're worthless, can't cook,
Can't do anything right.
If he didn't feel sorry for you,
He ask you to leave his sight.
But you're pitiful.
It would be too much trouble,
To get rid of you.
Soo boo-hoo-hoo in your tissue.
You have issues.
But he's wrong.
He's a jack ***!
What did you expect?
That this loser would come home,
And hand you his check?
Yeah right.
Those chances are too slim.
You're a Queen in this life.
Just not according to him.
2007-11-16 13:07:30 · 10 answers · asked by Semp-listic! 7 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Wow. Did you write this for me? Perfect timing.It's perfect.
added: And I am in the process of losing the loser.
2007-11-16 13:23:41 · answer #1 · answered by mrs O 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Great poem Semper Fi and that sounds like my life with my ex,You get tired of getting put down all the time; and at some point you have no leave; the zero; and find yourself; a hero..
2007-11-16 13:42:07 · answer #2 · answered by Cami lives 6 · 3⤊ 0⤋
Great poem. Sadly, you've accurately described the situations of many women.
I disagree with the first person. Poetry is an art. And the only rules that an artist has to follow are his/her own. You're quite talented.
2007-11-17 02:21:35 · answer #3 · answered by SINDY 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
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2016-09-29 09:35:48 · answer #4 · answered by ? 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i have been there before, i wish i would of known you back then, maybe you would of inspired me to pack up and move on a lot sooner, it would have prevented all that extra pain. hopefully someone else will read it and it will touch them, maybe give them the courage to stand up for herself and say that's enough. thank you.
2007-11-16 14:32:05 · answer #5 · answered by ? 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Great, man. I really like your style. Very real, very powerfully put out there. Kudos again.
2007-11-16 14:42:10 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I give you an A for effort and for Awesomely putting it out there. :)
2007-11-16 14:23:44 · answer #7 · answered by Bree 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
well i think that the rhymes you have are good but you should be more consistant when you ryhme like, make a poem withh all ryhme or with none.
2007-11-16 13:19:20 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 2⤋
have you been talking to denise c.?
2007-11-16 14:05:31 · answer #9 · answered by joe c 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
haha i love it!
2007-11-16 15:25:33 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋