i need a good sentence to end my essay.
Here's the sentence that will be before it:
In the day of the graduation, Carlie, Harvey, Mr.Garrason, Mr. and Mrs. Mason, his mom, and Carlie's bodyguards went to see Thomas J graduate.
I need a good sentence to end my story.. like they all live happily ever after<--- too old.
Any ideas and suggestions will be appriciated.
2007-11-15 15:24:37 · 16 answers · asked by Animal Luverr™ 4 in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
As the sun above Thomas' head hit the zenith, the air turned so thick, one could almost taste all of their pride and joy.
2007-11-15 15:37:31 · answer #1 · answered by ? 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I would rewrite the penultimate sentence this way:
All who were close and supportive of Thomas J, notably his mom and the others-with bodyguards in tow, witnessed his graduation ceremony.
The final sentence:
A seemingly simple event, This achievement proved that even the sky, has no limitations.
I don't like to see parts of the same word used more than once in a sentence. Graduation and graduate are redundant. I don't know how the people listed are used in your essay, but I would bet that the reader would know who they are. Therefore, most of the names can be excluded.
2007-11-15 15:37:09 · answer #2 · answered by black57 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Leave it like that. Except put ......... <----- at the end of graduate. so.. its
In the day of the graduation, Carlie, Harvey, Mr.Garrason, Mr. and Mrs. Mason, his mom, and Carlie's bodyguards went to see Thomas J graduate......
2007-11-15 15:28:33 · answer #3 · answered by Sarah 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your listing too many names, the sentence seems kind of awkward. It's kind of hard to end a story that you didn't write if we know nothing about it also, I think only you can do that.
Thomas' friends and family and his families bodyguards arrived promptly on the day of Thomas J's graduation to see him graduate.
thats how i'd rewrite that sentence, but once again its hard to think of something to write if we know nothing of your story and how the characters relate to the main character.
2007-11-15 15:30:51 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Everything turned out the way Carlie wanted and she continued through the path she chose.
2007-11-15 15:28:59 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Everyone present allowed their emotional guard to drop, freeing a celebratory river of tears that drowned the emotions of the now forgotten past, and to carve a fresh path of promise into the beckoning future.
2007-11-15 15:37:29 · answer #6 · answered by keefbeef 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
No only some live. The body guards all die Only Mr Mason dies saving his wife. She donates his pension for a scholarship
2007-11-15 15:58:15 · answer #7 · answered by JOHN 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Always leave the reader wanting more. However, this sentence shout support your thesis of the essay. Make a point of what you want to say.
2007-11-15 15:30:05 · answer #8 · answered by Tim 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
you could say something like. Now that you've read this you should want to recycle. or do you see now what not recycling does to the community? Recycle for a better future.
2016-05-23 08:51:08 · answer #9 · answered by ? 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
u can say one of my personal favorites:
time goes by,people change,life goes on
just modify it to better suit ur strategy eg.change the tense or make some of the people u mention say it or something like that ok?
2007-11-15 15:30:12 · answer #10 · answered by IKKITOUSEN 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋