Our house may have changed, but it will forever hold the relic of a family’s undying love.
OR
Our previous home may have been reduced to merely a dump, but it will forever hold the relic of a family's undying love.
Which moves you more...i don't want to sway people away by too much words...but the second one is more specific
Also, you can post some ideas of your own :)
2007-11-12 18:19:26 · 6 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
the 1st one
2007-11-12 18:22:45 · answer #1 · answered by Love ya 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I agree with TitoBob, use "memory" instead of "relic". Also, I would choose the second one, but would change it to:
"Our previous home may have been reduced to a mere dump, but it will forever hold the memory of a family's undying love."
2007-11-13 02:47:23 · answer #2 · answered by abulshabab 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
The first one has more emotional impact, because it doesn't get enmeshed with details in the part that doesn't make the main point. I would not use the word "relic" - it doesn't really make sense. I would suggest the simple word "memory".
2007-11-13 02:27:00 · answer #3 · answered by TitoBob 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
First for sure and I would say "memory" or "warmth" or "history" instead of relic.
2007-11-13 02:28:46 · answer #4 · answered by joellemoe 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The first one.
And take our advice: don't use relic in this context.
2007-11-13 03:36:24 · answer #5 · answered by Bethany 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
the 1st one
2007-11-13 02:41:36 · answer #6 · answered by Anon_girl 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋