--Future time, future space---... by Haji
Good bye.
I'm back.
2007-11-12 07:31:47 · 8 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
What a marvelous poem, a great piece of poetry not even Shakespeare can write. Lots of deep meanings with high creativity in the pictures you brought unto this poem. It is Unique, genius. The patterns you draw WOW. The rhyming is great.
Edit: they took it serious, eh?
2007-11-12 07:38:08 · answer #1 · answered by ? 6 · 7⤊ 0⤋
This poem does not suck. this is extremely good. Your in elementary terms blunders replaced into which you replaced "demanding" interior the process the poem. it is going to hold the same demanding in the time of. You began out with the "cutting-edge demanding" and it is the way it might examine with minor revision to hold it to the tip. this is particularly an incredible piece, has something poignant to narrate and you have completed extremely nicely with the imagery you have used. do no longer short replace this one, this is a keeper. it is an incredible write!!! i'm so close, i'm quite much there arms achieving for the duration of the air only one greater inch, only slightly greater; then the celeb would be mine, for all to adore. My fingertips graze the sting of the fire and enable my heart fill with want; yet i think no warmth, no scold of the solar as my arms curl, one by using one. I pull down my fist, yet no celeb is interior; i think all my goals wither and die. actuality hurts, this is bitter and tough it will in no way take place, i'm going to in no way be close sufficient.
2016-10-16 06:46:21 · answer #2 · answered by Erika 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I would not have known that was theme of your poem had you not prepared me for it. It is quite short no depth, no character, no good.Poetry must come from the heart it should convey the emotion of the poet in every eloquent phrase that is uttered.True poetry needs no preparation.
2007-11-12 07:39:56 · answer #3 · answered by robert s 5 · 3⤊ 0⤋
I think it'll be a great motivational poster. Just put it with a brilliantly colored but impossibly vague landscape scene and you've got a winner.
2007-11-12 07:37:19 · answer #4 · answered by peroxidekween 4 · 3⤊ 0⤋
Hell Naw!!! You are quite a character aren't you I would love to see some of your amazing poetry here on yahoo!
2007-11-12 08:02:59 · answer #5 · answered by Runteldat 3 · 2⤊ 0⤋
that's quite creative, but it doesn't rhyme...:-/
but here's a suggestion, try switching the 2 lines!
since he can time travel then he might return to the time before he left...
anyway, i still like it
2007-11-12 07:40:04 · answer #6 · answered by Khaled Z 3 · 4⤊ 0⤋
Hahah. Clever. Maybe call it a narrative.
2007-11-12 07:35:20 · answer #7 · answered by Crash 2 · 3⤊ 0⤋
i think you need to work on it a little more : ( sorry
2007-11-12 07:34:45 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 5⤊ 0⤋