This ok..?

Question

you are my best friend
we share this certain bond
our friendship will stay 'til the end
no need for spells or a magic wand

this will last
for eternity and more
keep the memories of the past
and how without eachother, life is a bore

our lives are fun
especially when our paths cross
this everlasting thing is what we won

u save me from my troubles
and pick me up when im down
the 'everlasting' doubles
for we never have a frown

we can lean on eachother
balancing everything that's on our shoulders
and nothing you need to let out will smother
me even if it's as heavy as boulders

this bond is strong
and forever
if u need me to listen, or tag along
ill never say never

we are just like sisters
talk about anything and everything
we can keep this friendship working
no matter what we need to bring

we take things seriously
but only when we need to
if our paths go in different directions
we'll know what to do

if your ever upset
your heart will mend
we have a certain love
that of family and a friend

im 13, and i was wonderin if this poem was good or not..?

i wrote i myself, i like to write poetry.
and i put this in P&S cuz i would like to see how my fellow P&S-ers would answer

:D

Answer 1

awwwww, I just read that to my best friend ;)

Answer 2

That is very nice,
now all you need is the music to go with it.
Because you did an excellent job with the lyrics.

Answer 3

It's good. Keep writing. Don't listen to grace_ anatomy1111.
Everyone has to start somewhere.

Answer 4

thats cute good job i could never have teh patience to write something like that

Answer 5

its great i wish i could ryme like that this is a great poem

Answer 6

its cute. but i think that rhythm is more important than rhyme,

Answer 7

i like it it's great

Answer 8

its great ...
i only wish we were as strong as words say ...i love it ...thx

Answer 9

whew that was a mouthfull....and kinda cheesy