I know...there are so many things i should be thankful for...
but all those things....no matter how i try...
they just can't measure up with all the hate and pain and madness i feel inside me.
I do want to be happy...who doesn't? but my mind...my heart...and my soul won't let me!
thus i blame none but my mind, my heart, and my soul!
and my hostility for them is insanely baffling
I feel ...my end is near...and i deliberately brought it upon me...
and i am guilty for being selfish...for once in my life...I am being selfish.
for the first time in my life...I concede...I am just a gutless wonder ..a no one...
i never really have the true strength to defy what fate had in store for me
How ridiculous i was...for even thinking i could avert this absolute tragedy!
My battle is lost...my cause was merely but an empty vindication.
2007-11-09 14:58:57 · 5 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
jam
did it not ever occur to you that maybe i have no one close to share this with?
2007-11-09 15:20:52 · update #1
yes you are a selfish one, why dont you share all waht you feel to anyone so that your feelinf would be relieve.
share it to anyone that is close to you heart, maybe a bestfriend, a family member or to someone that you could talk with serious matters.
2007-11-09 15:05:00 · answer #1 · answered by jam 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Effective writing, in general, hasn't really got so many ellipses in it.
It's interesting the way you differentiate between "me" and "my mind, my heart, and my soul." Who are you if not one or more of those things?
I'm gonna give you some unsolicited advice: when your mind/heart/soul won't let you be happy, it's time to get out and go somewhere. Seriously. Go somewhere you've never gone and talk to at least one person. Talk about them, not you. The simple act of breaking your patterns and getting absorbed in somebody else's story helps a lot.
2007-11-09 20:14:12 · answer #2 · answered by Drew 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Whoa! How upside down you feel!
This is prose, this isn't poetry. I think you need to organize this short little piece into paragraphs and then spend some time fleshing it out...adding a little more of how you feel, and then editing. Self-loathing is actually quite common. Use it to your advantage and write something you'll be proud of. I think you can. These "meanderings" of yours are priceless. Be your own best friend and develop pieces like this. Don't be hung up on whether it's poetry or prose. Both have value and both have a forum.
2007-11-10 09:48:50 · answer #3 · answered by margot 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
indeed effective insofar as self-pity goes.
2007-11-09 19:57:35 · answer #4 · answered by ari-pup 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
for me, it is.
the content is sad yet it's good writing.
2007-11-09 19:57:26 · answer #5 · answered by -"CuRiOuS CaT"- 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋