Do you like this one?

Question

DEMONS WITH IN

With in her world, so dark and deep,
She shuts it out, no one to hear her weep
Here she hungers for the pain to end,
The sorrow, sadness, the hole to mend,
Deep, deep down, with in herself she hides,
Carrying emotions, what a rollercoaster ride,
No one sees the feelings when they take a look,
She keeps them guarded, they're a mystery book,
The infant helpless, the child craves love,
The adult seeks everything, keeping faith above,
The infant carressed, the child taught pain,
The adult to remember it over and over again,
To put a painful past to rest,
The adult must face the Demons best,
Accept, confront, battle and beat,
All the Demons her conscious meets,
Face them with a brave heart so true,
Hold them back, til the dragons are slain through

I wrote this during a low time in my life, much of my poetry is written from the emotions with in. I hope you like them, the dark as well as the ones found in the light.

Justina

Answer 1

Its amazing <33

Answer 2

Well, it is rather dark and full of pain, but the ending shows a hint of light to come, so that's nice. I'm not really a poetry fan, but I believe others might like this. Especially if they like dark, realistic themes with hope at the end.

Answer 3

Ya know, I don't much care for deeply troubled, emotional poems anymore, but I have to say this one is actually pretty good. I especially like the last few lines, even more especially the last line. Good work.

Answer 4

Oh My Gosh That is the best poem I have ever heard. I can write poems but I could never write anything like that. It is really great!!!

Answer 5

the light is gone hope is destroyed. great great poem though

Answer 6

Yes..I do like this one.