CAn you tell me what you think of my poem?

Question

Here's the link to veiw it and rate it. Please tell me what you think. I'm not much of a poet I just recently just started getting involved with submitting stuff because a couple of people said I should. I'm realy more of a director. But ya tell me what you think.

http://www.poetry.com/voteforme/poemvote1.asp?PID=12590140

Answer 1

Excellent poem but correct these errors:
to say Goodbye
gone too soon

Answer 2

love it