Okay does this one make sense now?

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Okay does this one make sense now?

I fight to do whats right
I long to do whats wrong
I must be strong
People dont understand
They dont know my heart
or their not that smart
I must go
and let them know
I am no wild thing
I am a child of the king
There was a price paid
and nothing is greater
Than the sacrifice he made.

2007-11-09 04:42:21 · 2 answers · asked by Oh so Confused? 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry

2 answers

Not bad!

2007-11-09 04:48:13 · answer #1 · answered by curious connie 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋

sounds okay to me. you could make this more serious and emphatic:

I am no wild thing
.

2007-11-09 12:14:32 · answer #2 · answered by ari-pup 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋