Back to feeling
hours of song bingeing,
I'm gettin tired of listening
somehow whatever i'm doing
after awhile everything gets boring
now i'm staring blankly on walls
I guess i'm waiting til it all falls
brain cells stiffening
i can feel it coming...
I have to do something
before i start vanishing!
squeeze out some emotions
hope to find some commotion
there is nothing...pure nothing...
and i'm not sad...no not sappy
rather weary...neither happy...
In fact I don't feel a thing!
same old torments
another one of those moments
see you later when i'm back to feeling
that's when I'm done with the bleeding!
2007-11-08 18:11:46 · 10 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
LOLZ at Imani hahaha =P
2007-11-08 18:39:18 · update #1
This is more of a rap. I'd love to hear it set to music.
2007-11-08 23:59:52 · answer #1 · answered by Elaine P...is for Poetry 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Acutally, this makes me understand emo a bit more. Emo tries to seem emotionally sensitive, super-depressed, but really its just boredom...
This generation is more bored than any before it.
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2007-11-09 02:20:03 · answer #2 · answered by Nathan D 5 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Mmm, sounds more like a song than a poem, because of the way you use your rhymes: most are couplet rhymes and with lines of different length, it does not sound too good. Why don't you give up the rhymes???
2007-11-09 02:35:39 · answer #3 · answered by Lady Annabella-VInylist 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
i like the poem... though I hate the emo phase we have going on in society... life is not all that bad to not deal with it like a normal human being..... and the hurt is worth all the happiness you get when living life to the fullest.. :)
2007-11-09 02:14:30 · answer #4 · answered by llcentlous 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Ugh, hate feeling like that! Or, rather, unfeeling. o.0 Anyway, marevelously descriptive!
2007-11-09 11:36:27 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Uhhh, interesting. Some little tweaks and it will be really good but if you like it, keep it that way.
By the way, was that about you period?
2007-11-09 02:16:33 · answer #6 · answered by Imani 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
the feelings expressed are magnificent,,,,,but somewhere in middle it doesnt quite like a poem,,,,the verses do sound like simple statements,,reading it just as a feeler,,,its quite a nice piece,,,but not as good as a poem,,,,,,otherwise confusion set up is quite cool.........
2007-11-09 02:16:25 · answer #7 · answered by I M Stoned 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
i guess people dono wat to do these days.. but not bad 4 a poem.
2007-11-09 02:20:19 · answer #8 · answered by pure_fun 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
thats not a question u loser :)
2007-11-09 02:14:19 · answer #9 · answered by Safiya 2 · 0⤊ 3⤋
Umm. . .wat was that all about?!! U r a weirdo!
2007-11-09 02:13:53 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 1⤋