fading away
Silky summer waves,
Lost one summer day.
The trapdoor of my mind,
Locked forever and all time.
Days of childhood dreams,
I strain just to remember.
Places I'll never be,
Where shadows disappear.
Ever since those days,
I fade like mmorning dew.
My memories have been silenced,
Just like a child's dream.
All my days the same,
A kaliedescope of emotion.
Dar imending days,
The scent of falling rain.
One recurring memory,
It seems like yesterday.
Someone that I need to see,
At the far end of the road.
Everyone waits for just this day,
When everything is changed.
I never even wanted to stay,
Everything was just in vain.
Withering dead emotions,
As I slowly fade away.
2007-11-08 07:59:24 · 9 answers · asked by The Dark Prince 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
wow I like this.....I see where some refinement can come in but I dig the fluidity of the piece.
Write on!!
Earth
2007-11-08 08:16:19 · answer #1 · answered by Earth the Poet 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it, sufficiently depressing to actually evoke emotion in me. You can really feel for the person in the poem. About Alzheimer's perhaps? Shot in the dark, but either way, I say it is good poem because it caused emotion to be felt by the reader (me) and that is what poetry should be, evocative.
2007-11-08 16:03:44 · answer #2 · answered by Cogito 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
All life will, eventually, fade away. Freud himself said that the ultimate purpose of life is death.
Just don't let Thanatos take over you! Leave some hope there to Eros...
I love the image of summer fading away... summer is my favourite season.
2007-11-09 03:32:56 · answer #3 · answered by Analyst 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Depressing need I say more
It's Sadness galore
What the heck is if for?
Life that's gone before?
That's deaden and no more
Emotions fade what for?
Please don't write any more
I want happiness galore
Not sadness need I say more?
2007-11-08 16:42:39 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
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omg, that is really good! did u write that? I wish i could write, mine never turn out good, but that is realllllly good, i like it alot. its kinda depressing though.
it doesnt rhyme but for some reason it just feels like it does, it flows really well, thats really good!
<3bindorski
2007-11-08 16:16:42 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
that's good
vivid
fluid. like waves.
kinda calming, too (??) that might just be me.
keep writing. i love your dark poetry. you have talent...
2007-11-08 16:51:54 · answer #6 · answered by kleptomanic sheep 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow that was a wonderful ; loving haunting poem; and it; was so great,i loved every word...
2007-11-08 19:00:45 · answer #7 · answered by Cami lives 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its good... in a dreary sort of way.. i would hate it if your ever stoped writing though.. its soo.. nice.
2007-11-08 16:16:45 · answer #8 · answered by dragonflyy 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like it
2007-11-08 17:14:30 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋