Hate
I see you there...
right in front of me...
i see the hate in your eyes
your clenched fists....
and i hate you....
i hate how you hate me
and tears are building up in my eyes
but i can't let you see that!
no i won't let you see...
how much you're hurting me....
i grit my teeth in pain...
in hate....
in love....
2007-11-07 22:39:36 · 10 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Todd!!! sorry i clicked the wrong button (again!) i meant to give you thumbs up!
could'nt they just put more space between the up and the down????? =(
2007-11-08 00:24:39 · update #1
In my opinion, there is quite an irony reflected in your poem. If you will look at it in a deeper level, yes, there is hate but I can see more than hate and that is about a person who tries to hide his/her true feelings and is secretly yearning to be noticed... to be loved.
2007-11-07 22:49:05 · answer #1 · answered by pissedoffchick_01 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I've always thought that the best love poem is a lost love poem. The first time I read this I didn't much like it at all. The second time I read it I liked it quite a bit. It is simple but shows all the rage of the "breakup."
I believe you in this poem. I believe you are hurt and mad and obsessed.
Keep up the good work.
2007-11-08 11:01:45 · answer #2 · answered by Bill 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hate and love are "two wings of the same bird," as the latest saying goes. Your struggle to hide your pain touches the reader and your use of the present progressive tense "you're hurting me" makes the pain and the struggle immediate and continuing. I like the way you write and feel you should begin to explore ways to publish your poetry. You might even think of self-publishing your own book of poetry.
2007-11-08 07:35:51 · answer #3 · answered by Elaine P...is for Poetry 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Wow, seems to to describe just how fine the line between Love and hate is. I like it...a lot!
2007-11-08 06:50:01 · answer #4 · answered by tcstevo78 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Well, I agree with you--there are some things that you could do or add here.
But to your question: How does it feel?
It feels honest. It has a flow to it. I can detect the voice clearly. I like the ending quite a bit.
2007-11-08 07:58:45 · answer #5 · answered by Todd 7 · 1⤊ 1⤋
The poem has poignancy
It's deeply personal
I'm jealous
Damn
2007-11-08 12:03:27 · answer #6 · answered by Lance 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Dark, but I like it.
Have you ever heard of www.fictionpress.com
Its a cool site that you can post your poetry on!
2007-11-08 06:47:49 · answer #7 · answered by Karmically Screwed 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
it feels like i'm at the gas pump... hate paying so much and wish i had an economy car
2007-11-08 09:29:25 · answer #8 · answered by enrique7718 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's a bit rough, but there's so much emotion in it that you don't really notice. Intense. =)
2007-11-08 11:47:31 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I like it.
2007-11-08 07:07:39 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋