Could you please check any grammatical errors in this sentence?

Question

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Regarding the ATB Meeting on Nov 5, we hereby convey to Your Excellency the members of our delegation who will participate in the said meeting.

1. ....
2. ....
3. ....

Should there be any additional member to the delegation, we would inform Your Excellency immediately. Thank you very much for Your Excellency’s kind assistance.

Answer 1

Your Excellency,regarding the ATB Meeting on November the Fifth,the members of our delegation participating will be
1...
2...
3..

Your Excellency will be informed immediately of any additions to this list. Your Excellency's contribution in this matter is very much appreciated.

Answer 2

Try fastballs rather than curveballs:

The members of the delegation who will participate in the ATB meeting on November 5th are as follows:


We will inform Your Excellency if other members are added to the delegation. Thank you very much for Your Excellency's kind assistance.

Answer 3

If you want to get a bit posh . . .



Regarding the ATB Meeting on 5 November, we hereby convey to Your Excellency the members of our delegation participating in the aforementioned meeting.

1.....
2.....
3.....

Should there be any need to add members to the delegation, we will immediately inform Your Excellency of the changes. Thank you very much for Your Excellency’s kind assistance.



Hope this helps . . .

Answer 4

I see about 20 errors, including failure to properly identify acronym, spelling, grammar, punctuation, missing words, and extraneous words. And, it's entirely unclear if "Your Excellency" is properly used. Although, it's clearly over-used.

Answer 5

The letter is quite in order.

Answer 6

Im not sure if it should be would inform or shold it be something else?

Answer 7

i think it will be we will in4m n not we would in4m