Help with literary examples of Satire???

Question

Sorry the paper looks kinda long but it isnt...im writing a short story in school and it has some literary requirements that i have to include..one being an example of satire...can some one please give me some ideas on how to incorporate it into my story...
thanxs...


Day by day, minute by minute, Tom the Terrible Turkey could smell himself sizzling after being baked on a shiny silver platter. Thanksgiving was getting closer and the farm was full of chaos. Tim just knew he be would be the first choice of the Buck family’s Thanksgiving dinner. He had to find a way to set up somebody else or the family would have nothing to eat for dinner and things would fall apart. It was time for hoe down, the annual party of the year and Tom had a wonderful idea; he would get sick, so the Bucks couldn’t eat him; he went to the festival without a jacket and caught the flu. Within the next week Papa Buck was spotted walking the lines of the farm. He was a hound looking for a fresh deer to kill, but in this case it was Tom. When he finally found him and noticed Tom was sick as a dog, he didn’t know what to do; since Tom was sick somebody else had to take his place. It would be Cowry the Clucking Chicken. When Papa finally got a hold of him, he notice Cowry was sick too; the disease must have spread in the coop and now things were beginning to fall apart; Papa had no idea on what he would do for dinner. His family wasn’t the usual every day farm people that ate greasy succulent bacon in the morning. Matter fact they ate no bacon because they didn’t eat pork. This meant Porky the Occupied Pig was out of the question the festive dinner. The family now had nothing to eat and the whole meal was ruined. They couldn’t have turkey, their chickens were sick and they didn’t eat pork. What would they do before Thanksgiving came? Its not like they could produce another turkey quick fast and in a hurry. Thanksgiving day was now a day a way and the Buck family still had nothing to eat for Thanksgiving other than the usual: cornbread, stuffing, macaroni, candied yams, apple pie, peach cobbler and banana pudding. Everything was falling apart on the Buck farm. A family tradition was about to be broken and animals in the farm were dieing, including Tom. This would be the worst Thanksgiving ever.

Answer 1

Cute story.
On the last line - are the animals "Dieing" as in dying, or are they all "Dieting"?
Typos can change the meaning a whole lot.
Satire is a direct commentary of a real-life situation with the names changed and certain actions over-exaggerated. This story is cute, but it is more along the lines of giving animals human characteristics than true satire.
True satire would be directly relating the animals to their specific dietary needs in real life and comparing their diet or diet restrictions to say, real-life dieters. So the chicken, which eats plants and insects, could be suddenly vegan and no longer eating insects, which affects the cow because suddenly the cow is attacked by flies the chickens should be eating, and so on.
Turkeys don't wear jackets, that's not how they catch colds or flus. To have him get the Asian bird flu would defeat his purpose - his goal is not to die, but to stay alive. Turkeys are fed a corn mash mixture with growth hormones in it so they get fat in all the right places. Have Tom Turkey stop eating the mash with the hormones on purpose as it is a commentary on health food proponents. Have him go on a strictly lettuce diet to reference high fashion models. So now he gets very skinny instead of fat, and becomes undesirable. The chickens see him and follow his lead as reference to people who follow trends. Because Tom and the chickens no longer eat insects - the infestation of insects ruins the cow. Leave the pig in because heavy consumers really are just there doing their thing (make sure you change the line to say it's the farmers who don't eat pork, not the chickens!)
Take out the last line - Thanksgiving is about giving thanks for whatever you have, and most bad Thanksgivings are remembered for years after and often with humor. But do have the farmer end up buying his dinner makings at the supermarket like everyone else, as that really happens in real life, most farmers rarely supply their own food for them selves and focus on one or two crops and sell them all and buy their food at the supermarkets.
And there's your satire.
Good luck.

Answer 2

Sorry, this is really not satire.