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Nicky and Alvina are the best couple ever. They were married 20 years ago, they have not lost any love to each other. They still stick together everyday and look after each other. They never feel bored because of they had been together that long times, the reason to keep those couple, is they found their real love.

Nicky and Alvina have known other since they were 4th grade, they were neighbors and classmates. They always went to park after school, obviously, they didn’t know the meaning of the word “Love” in that age, but it may a good start for them. Unfortunately, Nicky’s family has to move to other province because of his father business. Nicky and Alvina were never meet each other after their elementary school. They were attending high school on their own, they were miss each other, but 30 years ago, they can’t keep in touch by e-mail or phone.

They only can contact in letter, everything they did, they also wrote in letter. After two year, Alvina’s house got in fire, Nicky didn’t get any message from Alvina anymore. When Nicky finish his university, he went back to the town where he live when he was young, but he still can’t find any information about Alvina. Then Nicky find a job in there. Who would know, Alvina also was working at there, but they were just in different department. Finally, they met each other after work when they were waiting the bus, they didn’t talk in last 10 years. They were become very close like they usual be. They were married after 3 years, and had their first child the next year, until now, it was 20 years ago. Keep the relationship in 20 years is a really hard thing.

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Answer 1

Hello. I did it for you but I actually changed a lot around so that it made more sense. I hope you don't mind.

Nicky and Alvina are a great couple. They were married twenty years ago, they still love eachother. They still stick together everyday and look after each other. They are not bored with eachother,because of they had been together a long time. The reason they are still a couple is because they are in love.

Nicky and Alvina have known other since they were in 4th grade. They were neighbors and classmates. They always went to their favorite park after school. At that time they didn’t know the meaning of love, but they knew they had a special connection. Unfortunately for them, Nicky’s family had to move because of his father's business. Nicky and Alvina never met each other after Nick moved away. While attending high school , they were missed each other, but thirty years ago, they could not keep in touch.

They only way they could contact eachother was through the mail. Everything they did, was written in the letters they sent to eachother. After two years, Alvina’s house caught on fire, Nicky did not recieve any messages from Alvina after the incident. When Nicky finished college, he went back to the town where he lived when he was younger. Nicky could not find any information about Alvina and her family. Nicky decided to stay anyways and even found a job there. It was a coincidence that,Alvina also was also working at there. They did not know it because they worked in different departments. Fortunately they met each other after work while they were waiting for the bus. Even though they had not talked in ten years it was as if they never left eachother. Soon after they became very close with one another.They were married three years later, and had their first child the following year. They have remained in their relationship for twenty years. Being in a relationship that long was hard, but they were willing to put in the effort to make it work.

Answer 2

Nicky and Alvina are the best couple ever. They got married 20 years ago and have not lost any love for each other since. Nicky and Alvina still stick together everyday and look after each other. They are never bored. They have been together as long as they have because they found their real love.

Nicky and Alvina have known other since they were in the fourth grade; they were neighbors and classmates. They always went to the park together after school. Obviously, they didn’t know the meaning of the word “love” at that age, but it was already blossoming. Unfortunately, Nicky’s family had to move away to another town because of his father's business. Nicky and Alvina didn't meet again until after elementary school. (Doesn't make sense or fit in: They were attending high school on their own, they were miss each other.) Thirty years ago, they weren't able to keep in touch by e-mail or phone.

The only way they could contact each other was through letters. They wrote down everything they did in their letters. Two years later, Alvina’s house caught on fire. Nicky no longer received messages from Alvina. When Nicky finished university, he went back to the town he grew up in, but didn't find out any information about Alvina. Then Nicky find a job in there. Who would know, Alvina also was working at there, but they worked in different departments. Finally, they met each other after work when they were waiting for a bus. They hadn't talked in ten years. They were become very close like they used to be. Three years later, they were married. The next year they had their first child the next year. That was twenty years ago. It's very hard to keep a relationship for twenty years.

Answer 3

Nicky and Alvina are a great couple. They have been married for twenty years and they have not lost any love for eachother in that period of time. They still stick together everyday and look after each other. They never feel bored because they have grown to aprreciate their time together.,The reason they are so close and have such a great relationship because they have found true love.

Nicky and Alvina have known each other since they were in 4th grade; they were neighbors and classmates. They always went to the park after school. They obviously didn’t know the meaning of the word “Love” at that age, but they had something great from the beginning. Unfortunately, Nicky’s family has to move to other province because of his father business. Nicky and Alvina never saw each other after their elementary school years. They were attending high school on their own and they missed each other very much, but communication was hard because 30 years ago they did not have the accessability to email or talk over the phone.

They were only able to contact each other through letters. They wrote everything they did everyday in their letters. After two year, Alvina’s house caught on fire, Nicky stopped receiving letters from Alvina. When Nicky finish his University, he went back to the town where he lived when he was young, but he still couldn’t find any information about Alvina. Then Nicky found a job there. Who knew, Alvina also was working at the same place, but they were just in different departments. Finally, they ran into each other after work when they were waiting for the bus, they hadn't had contact in ten years. They were becoming very close like usual. They were married after three years, and had their first child the next year. Keeping a relationship so close to their hearts for twenty years was hard but they found each other in the end.





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Answer 4

Nicky and Alvina are a very loving couple
Although they were married 20 years ago, they are still as much in love as ever. They stay with each other and also look after each other. Even though thy have been together so many years, they are not bored, because each one found their true love.

Nicky and Alvina have known other since they were in 4th grade. They were neighbors and classmates and they always went to play in a park after school. Obviously, at that young age, they didn’t know the meaning of the word “love”, but these play days were a good beginning. And then, sadly,
Nicky’s family had to move to another province because of his father's business, and Nicky and Alvina were never to meet each other after their elementary school years
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They attended high school in different cities, so they really missed each other, but 30 years ago, there was no email or cheap long distance.

That took me about 15 minutes, so maybe someone else will do paragraph 2.

Answer 5

I'm not sure what grade you're in so I don't know what level you should be writing at, but I made some basic grammatic corrections and improved your flow and wording slightly:

Nicky and Alvina are the best couple ever. They were married 20 years ago and have not lost any love for each other. They still stick together everyday and look after each other. Although they have been together for so long, they have not lost excitement in their relationship. Nicky and Alvina have each found true love in the other, a passion for each other that is unwavering.

Nicky and Alvina have known each other since they were in 4th grade, they were neighbors and classmates. They always went to the park after school. They didn’t know the meaning of the word “love” at such a young age, but it was the perfect beginning to their fairy tale. However, Nicky’s family had to move to another state because of his father's business. Nicky and Alvina spent the rest of their childhood apart, each missed the other, but had trouble staying in contact. They could only communicate through letters.

After two years, Alvina’s house was destroyed in a fire, and Nicky no longer received letters from Alvina. When Nicky finished college, he returned to the city he grew up in in hoped of finding information about Alvina. He was unsuccessful, but found a job. Ironically, Alvina worked in the same store, but in a different department. Finally, they ran into each other after work while waiting for the bus. They talked excitedly, making up for 10 years of losy time. Soon, they continued the friendship they had lost so long ago. Nicky and Alvina married after 3 years, and had their first child the next year. Today, they have been together for over 20 years.

Answer 6

after ago put a period
capitalize They
for that long amount of time. (better wording)
Capitalize The
them as a couple, (better grammar)
in fourth grade( spell it out and add in)
word, "love" in that age,
to another province (add an to it..more formal)
never saw each other after elementary school (tense)
They were attending high school on their own. (period)
Capitalize They
were missing each other,(add ing ending for tense)
but about thirty years ago (add about and spell out 30)
add a period after ago.
capitalize They

overall not bad. a little hard to understand but not impossible. sorry for all the people who would not take the time. it is sure top be better if you make those changes i suggested. if you need anymore help you can email me.
good luck

Answer 7

As a general rule, when writing an essay, I make a statement and then back it up with information (referenced or not). This is what forms a paragraph. I think you should write a plan of what you want to write, thinking of what kind of statements you want to make. This way, you should hopefully find it easier to write the essay.

Answer 8

1. In "My sister is shy, more shy than me." Change it to "My sister is very shy. She is a lot more shy than me." In "Although my sister is shy and annoying, she is also nice." Add a conjunction to connect the compound sentence. In "Catherine has black, curly, hair and an oval face." Put some more detail to oval face. In "Can you believe that my sister is already in tenth grade but is still annoying and shy?" I think tenth graders are supposed to be annoying and shy, but if you want to keep it, then add a comma before but. 2. If she wants to achieve a good grade, which is a goal, then yes. Other than that I think you have a nice essay there. Good Job! Can I meet your sister?

Answer 9

Umm u use the word they too much when u start a sentence. u should add more detail or write a new one ^_^

Answer 10

WOW, WRITE A NEW ONE